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The peanut gallery takes 40%, the face slaping takes 30% and the cultivation growth through cheat the last 30%, nothing else to see here...............
1. I got a dig bick2. You that read wrong3. You read that wrong too4. You checked5. You smiled7. You are wandering why you are still reading this8. You saw that mistake, right?(On 7)10. But did you see that I skipped 6?10. You checked11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 912. I said "saw you" not you saw13. I also skipped 214. You got tricked15. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading!
Talking about ch 241. And i just want to say that i am a bit harsh with the critique, and just want to say that while there may be inconsistences (very few) those do not define the incredible book you have written. I trully enjoy reading it . In retrosepct i just want to say to you the author that you are doing an amazing job and do not lose confindence in yourself and you ability to write. Its just that when you are immersed in the book you can get heated real quick. So dont take the critque that you get to personal as most if not all come from passionate readers who enjoy your story. Its almost like when something bad (or not enjoyable) happens many will complain but when you are doing an amazing job, there is often no praise (if you take me as an example ahha). So keep up.
There is great potential in this male lead novel honestly. it has good story plot but it still needs revision. There were spaces after each sentence which made it look (poetical to me) but I still loved the fantasy anyways .If I'm to rate it overall, it's very interesting and deserves a five star. Writing isn't easy . Keep it up. As time goes on, it will keep improving and reach far.
good story speed is good not too slow not too fast either, development going well mc didn't just start having 6 women each scenario is well thought.The story is developing and i hope the author continue
i generly dont review this early, but from the authors other work, and the start of this one, i can say its gonna be really good and special. its an intresting take on vamp stories, give it a try.
Only 11 chapters so far but this is really a good novel IMO. Just straight up sexy novel no NTR so far just milfs just how I like it!!! Read the novel its great!
what I mad about this novel is the way MC act without thinking about the consequences of playing with the butterfly effect and the way that he cultivate doesn't get any struggle like the real wuxia novel.
Well done, try using some grammar tool to fix the mistakes, although it's not much obvious, more like once in 2 chaps.
Great story! keep going.
Why there no harem tagggu i wan the haremmm tagggu if he trap he seduce manny manny poople hmm. I want hareeemmmuuu its been so long since i seee a harem storrryu
The story is great! The chapters are a bit iffy because of some word mistakes and such, but man, a VR Moba that's similar to Lol and Dota 2? Count me in! The story really picks up after the first few chapters, although the MC isn't OP and lacks any knowledge of the game, but he's equipped with very great swordsmanship, courtesy of Mr. Ghost-san.
The character development is also pretty clear and I can't wait to read more. I'd like to see how our MC takes his unambitious character and changes it for the better!