Honest 7* review.
Ah, I can't exceed 5 stars. What a pity.
The writing quality is such that I was unable to find something to improve or correct.
As for the story, it is depicted with such details and realism that I find myself being immersed in the world as I would watch a movie (and live it).
I can perfectly imagine an anime or a movie being adapted from the book.
Note also the insane frequency at which the author is able to write one chapter after another! That requires tremendous talent and dedication.
So, you who is reading this review, please give all your power stones so that the author writes the rest of story.
Shameless review from a reader that wants to know what happens next.
Amazing but i really hate the time changes and how The story wont go in order like tell me he got fire resistance before the fight not After but amazing regardless
I'm not going to sugar-coat my review, so I hope you don't get too offended. Just know that I'm giving these criticisms because I want to help you improve.
To start off, your story was a great opening. It captured my attention and made me want to read more. Unfortunately, (and this seems to be a common problem) there are numerous grammar mistakes. Always remember to proofread your work. I'm not an editor, so I won't point out specifics. Instead, I want to give advice on the actual story.
The main character is interesting, but his tone of voice and choice of words are inconsistent. The syntax that you used makes him sound like some sort of a sassy girl, and I'm having a hard time taking him seriously. Additionally, the descriptions tend to shift between using contractions and not using contractions. I suggest that you stick with using contractions if you want to keep a casual tone because writing the words longhand can break the flow of the prose.
The final thing I want to mention is the worldbuilding (and this ties into the plot and characters as well). For the most part, the world just feels like a basic post-apocalypse with nothing special. I have only read up to the fifth chapter in detail (I've skimmed forward a little bit), but I didn't find anything that distinguished your world from others. For readers, the biggest appeal for a post-apocalyptic novel is the setting, but if it isn't interesting, then I find it hard to keep reading. If you want, you can start by developing interesting characters and later giving more detail on the world itself. But, the issue is that most of the characters aren't interesting at all. I think that the issue stems from the fact that much of the words are taken up by the main character's babbling and exposition. The story would have been much more engaging if you had taken the time to show how different characters interacted and revealed their motivations.
That's all I have to say, and I hope I didn't discourage you at all. I think your work has much potential, so I wanted to help you get better at writing. Keep up the good work!
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seems like a good read, somehow seemed a bit shallow though. however, if you just want to spend a little time on a feel goodish novel it might be for you
This novel is above average with new troupe that's it... and detailed review I will make after 30-40 chapter and I waiting for female main character and I hope there is really a main character or else he paranoid
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Hope to see new update soon.....is a master piece......will try to give as much power stone as I can...??????????????????????????????????????
Well written. This seems promising, I just hope the author will work on it seriously. As I read chapter everything was getting harder and harder, yeah ... Literally Everything!
Haven't read it uet, but since its this author, m sire it will be great! All the best for the novel. I'll read it once it has around 20 chapter
Hey!
Good day to you! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email mollyringdom*@*gmail.com (delete *）We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). Looking forward to your email.
A good book. And really great translation quality. The pacing of the story is also good so far. The original book is also completed with 348chapters. But the translations stopped after 42 which is disheartening. Hope it gets translated again