keep a good work author!
you deserve got 5 stars!!
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This **** is trash Mc wanna hide his personality when The previous Mc already forgot his memory everyone knows this whats the point in hiding it an then you got him hiding that he could do magic for no reason at all an then another turn off is wanting to make a portal to bring men to that world so dumb such a beta MC thats retarded so dumb most the time its just complaints about dumb stuff how to satisfy the world of woman like who cares you just woke up an now wanna take the frustrations of all woman pullin a naruto GARBAGE
I do not have the whole idea of the story but the game is so dumb. Who can ever play a game like this . This is really a bad one and I really do not like it. It's kind of exaggerated too
overall below average novel. MC got lucky in character creation and is totally OP. there is no some great world background, nor any good character interaction. so far it is full of VR novel cliches and if you take any novel in that category there is more than 50% chance that it will be much better than this one.
also contains racism, so i changed it from 2 stars to 1 star.
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Nothing makes sense, why can't this novel be chosen? its probably because its system isn't stupid. its a new idea too unlike the generic everything that is usually chosen. it doesn't have a 3.8 rating, so it can't be chosen.
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just the first sentence, knocked me off of my seat. this is new, a good new, a beautiful new, and I love it
This feels more lIke an essay more than a story lol. The explanations are too long which is not yet needed. All the cultivation level is introduced at the start leaving no excitement for the readers to explore and continue reading on the systems.
The author could have tried to introduced the cultivation leVels and the world in a mystifying way when the readers will all be piqued.
I must say that the author has good ideas but how he expose the story and narrates It does not give any thrill to the readers or make the readers hooked on the story.
I love this novel ❣
Hmm, the writing could be better and the characters lack in depth characterization. The pacing is fast, and the MC is rather evil. Ignoring my personal opinion on MC, my issue is the psychology state of the villain. Someone that broken would not be able to safely transition to another world and accept a new family, because they are incapable of trust. A more logical conclusion would have been killing his new family. My suggestion is ground your character more, this will make them more realistic and more terrifying.
This is MTL quality!If sentences like the following wouldn't stop you from reading a good story go right ahead. Everyone else this one is not for you."The light crossbow in the hand still pulled the arrow on the string, pulled the trigger to shoot at the bottom at the same time, still turned his head to urge loudly: “speed faster! Is your limp movement a sign that you have not eaten this morning? !”