I really liked your description and synopsis. I think you can write quite well so keep on writing and update soon..
Looking forward to it......
im confused. idk if i should be impressed by the quality of writing, the number of chapters, the plot, the characters, the tension or the folds of problems the mc faces in his life the big and the small, everything, paced perfectly and woah so many chapters! THE ONLY OFFPUTTING THING HERE WAS THAT SASHA'S PRONOUNS KEEP SWITCHING FROM HE AND SHE IN CHAPTER 3 I THINK idk please correct that, adding to my library to continue reading further till my broke ass retrieves coinsss hehe [img=recommend][img=update][img=fp][img=coins]
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A fun story whose premise reminds me of the great anime of the 90s like Starship Girl Yohko Yamamoto but with the flair and tropes of the 2010s! An excellent and fresh novel! I look forward to more.
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Definitely piqued my interest. I'm a sucker for romance especially when the God's are involved. Father son quarrels. Cherry poppin foreplay. Keeps me wanting more that's for sure. I would like more updates of chapters to be stable but I'll take what I can get cause all I can do is wait. #shameless ??
Im sorry but this story is just way to slow. Literally nothing happens and the pacing is off by a lot. It's not really filler but a lot of the chapters a filled with pointless stuff. I may sound harsh but I was expecting it to be slow but not this slow. I've read up to chapter 80 something and he has taught his disciple twice. I guess this is meant to be a chill novel but this is just boring. The writing quality is good tho and the world building is also good but slow.
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This is honestly a real good novel
The world building is really good and the characters are also somewhat unique
Although the obsessiveness that the female characters have is rather overdone a bit
Overall it’s a really good novel to read
This is a splendid thriller novel, as this is my first time doing a review please excuse me for any misconduct in my part. What I really like about this is the different setting for each arc. The background of each arc is quite detailed and that's what I like about it. The MC is a writer who reads many things and a logicl thinking type. As far as I last read from shiro, there's no harem. Great story though, has a lot of potential. It's not survival-oriented like TI, but just a good mystery, thriller, horror story with some game-elements. Worth the like!
I read the prologue and the first chapter. I must say author put a lot of effort in it and it's well written.
The quality of the novel is top notch and I didn't find much errors in the vocabulary as well.
The only drawback I found is that there is no attention grabber moment in the first chapter. Most readers skip the novel after reading the first chapter and synopsis.
If the synopsis is interesting enough to let them read more, they'll stay for more chapters.
But in this, everything is confusing. The story started off in the present with a little bit of information of MCs back story and her family's tragic end seven years ago. Other than that, nothing interesting came up that intrigued me to read more.
Even the synopsis is short with no information about the main plot that might interest someone.
Dear Author, your writing quality is good enough to reach readers attention but if the storyline is not interesting. No one will read it. So, try to put things in the first chapter or synopsis like showing a trailer so that more readers will enjoy your novel with proper understanding what's going on.
I know it's just a first chapter but put some elements that is attention grabber. Also, please reedit your synopsis and book cover so that it will attract readers indirectly. Thank you! I'm looking forward for your positive response.
Nice story. I like it's development very much.
The MC is also smart and intelligent. The background is also nice.
What I like the most is the story's plot.
Keep it up