I realy just wanted to write you a private message but couldn't find how sorry its a somewhat bad review but i will explain as much as i can and hopefully it will help in some way. Please take it as a constructive critism.After getting that out of the way the next section:Writing Quality - pretty good no mispelled words or typos in general so thats a plus.The writing style on the other hand could be better - the way you describe the outside world and the character's inner world is either lacking or childish either way i suggest you reaserch and practice more on those - will be mentioned again on 'characters'.Stability of Updates - every day! which is way better than most so 5/5 on that.Story Develepment - Pretty bad realy, the story is more 'character driven' meaning MC going around doing what feels right with no concrete theme or plot.Example of a plot: "we need to destroy this evil ring in a distant and dangerous place" cliche i know but its a good classic plot.another point regarding plot - i would like to introduce a thing to you called 'Chekhov's gun' basically its a term based on a saying of a famous writer, he said thus: "If in the first act you have hung a pistol on the wall, then in the following one it should be fired. Otherwise don't put it there."(Please research this further it involves more princple and will help you!)What i'm saying is: you have randomness in the story, now surprises or "suddeness" for lack of better word, is not bad but randomness is, what i mean is if a hungry wolf showed and begged for leftovers near the fire he doesnt just bolt right away and never apears again he should be back some day and it will be relevant (if you did things well that is) but you barely gave it one paragraph we know so little about that wolf that even if he did come back it will not be cool or meaningful.we slowly make our way into --World Background - because the same point is relevant there as wellin some instances MC is walking around town talking to merchants, buying/selling or admiring merchandise.when in that town they stay at an in and you gave some attention to a Lily character that worked there.in all those situation and MORE there is no effing interactions!! ZERO!!!he doesnt talk to the barmaid at all, the cool merchant selling the most expensive enchnted wepons just nods once at the MC friend while polishing a sword.Even the cool hammer thing didn't have a symbol so they can later find the blacksmith of the thing and establish some connction.Basically you show zero planning ahead, more than that, you leave your world barren from the thing that give life to a world like local rumors/humor/sayings/etc and that leaves your world building in the gutter compared to what it COULD be.Character Design - In a first look it looks like they are a bit 2 dimensional, like their inner world isnt very well developed but i tend to belive you have a good grasp of the chrarcter you want them to have, but just CANT bring it out properly meaning you don't express them correctly or well enough which connects us to style which i discussed before.Thank you fo reading this far and sorry about the spelling which is probably not perfect. I hope i got my points across and hope you will notice such things and plan better as you go along.I would also like yo point out i don't hate the story and may continue to read it my personal enjoyment is 7/10 which is pretty good.There is more to say but this should be good for now.
I am sorry author but after the addition of the Qi shan, the story became irritating to read and after investing so much time and keys into the chapter, I am meeting with this disappointment. I even waited that maybe the character is only irritating at the start but oh man even after 10 chapter, she and mc is as irritating as ever. And because of Qi shan, Mc's interactions with other characters like house spirit or his teacher is also getting irritating and cringy, sorry but I don't it was a nice idea to add Qi shan here.
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Not really a review but this novel is perfect for someone who doesn't have anything better to do and with much time to waste. I recommend this my whole heart. Kudos to author.
yo wtf u doing finish the damn story and stop being so overly descriptive with things and using big ass words that make no sense, and how is Cain going to get to God hood with how stupidly hard u made it for him to advance in cultivation there's like no way he will be able to get far with how he is now.
I like author writing and the way plot is going. stability is impeccable as the author didn't miss even one day and updates every day since like 2 months ago. Characters are so nice females have their own personalities I love it. Xiao Wen is the best, please make her my wife.
The principle of the book is don't be poor. And no matter the world's problems, everything can be solved with money and a little violence. And that's it. Some newspapers with daily news can provide a more pleasant reading about this reality.
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The best book on this site. Probably not for everyone, but for me. A heartwarming story which brings you to think about your own life and the world you live in. It is a shame this story is one of it's kind because I could read so much more of it. (Even the author only wrote one such story)
what is raw title of this book? ?? ?? ?
It's nice, though it's still two chapters but i am super looking forward to what will happen next kyahhhhkeep up the good work my co-writer
You should not put misleading labels, since, although the term cultivation can also be understood as cultivating your forces (army, supplies, etc.), in most cases it is associated with the cultivation of qi, and many will come here thinking that it is a cultivation novel, although somewhat rare, but still the novel is good, I recommend it