I love this story! It's very interesting and always leave me wanting to know more. The writing and the story development are very good. I recommend it for anyone who likes thrillers, mystery and twisted romance. Keep up the good work author?
Not sure what to say regarding this since it's only the first chapter but it looks good so far
So far the story is actually pretty good, even though the concepts have been overused. I can only hope that this one does not go in the route of the absurd, though the synopses suggested that it would. I am looking forward to more chapters and would not mind this one being picked.
literally a 12 year-old wet dream on crack
The MC is a big pussy... Feudal Japan and treats it like a modern world.. A big idiot and very irritating MC..
Skip it.. not worth it if you hate those kind of MCs
Very good.
To put it simply, it is a great book, however the translation quality is so bad that I physically cringe through half the chapters.------------------------------------------
I have been mostly enjoying the story. I have quite an ability to suspend disbelief and just go along with the flow of a story. I like the characters, the backstories and families. But the writing is killing me. Since I started reading web novels, I have gradually acquired the ability to ignore typos and poor grammar to a large extent, but since stories magically turn into three-dimensional movies or holograms in my head, I have great difficulty with behavior of characters that seems preposterous or caricaturish (if that is a word.) They kick me out of my 3D movie and remind me that this is just words.
The main character laughs and chuckles every second time he opens his mouth, frequently described as "lowly"." To quote Inigo Montoya, "You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means." Lowly = of humble or base birth. It has nothing to do with sound volume. Also people sigh, loudly, frequently. In real life people sigh because they are frustrated, disappointed, depressed or really tired, and it's considered rude or a comment. One character laughs then sighs two seconds later. Another sighs, chuckling. Try doing that. It's not possible. The worst one is the use of the word "softly" with just about every smile in the first 20 chapters. Softly implies intimacy. Smiling softly is something you would do during a touching moment with a loved one, or while looking down at your newborn baby. It's not something a stranger does to someone they meet the first time for an interview. Reading the softly smiling over and over again gave me the creeps, like I'm reading about a serial killer softly smiling at the knife he just used to slice the throat of his latest victim, or fondling the organ he removed as a trophy. Yuck!!!!
Author, please learn the many different types of smiles, and that the only time people laugh so much when they interact with others is when they're nervous, flirting, or are Santa Claus, paid to say ho ho ho. If you could remove the strange emoting the characters are doing, I'm sure I could spend most of my time enjoying my 3D movie of your story. I suggest you do some people watching. For instance, you don't talk about hand gestures at all. A lot of people talk with their hands. They also fiddle with their hair, and touch things and people around them. You also don't mention body language at all. I don't mean that you have to add all of those at the same time, just sprinkling in a little of all of them at different times brings characters to life.
This is actually a really good story so far >~< when I started it last night, I genuinely didn't think much of it, due to the grammatical errors and such, as well as the fact that the other 2 webnovels I've read were both really well known with few errors and stuff. But, I find this one just as interesting and in-depth ^-^ 10/10 would recommend
5 star ,cause this novel make me laugh so hard,, keep it up author ,,nice work
I love it!............. It’s been really interesting so far from what I see! ................. Totally recommend it!! :) .................... PLZ UPDATE SOON! •^•
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.
Love this series that is finished.