It seems really promising ^_^ The concept reminded me Dead Island's 2 trailer. I will read more chapters before I decide to have a positive or negative opinion. I just hope that the author will keep it that way and won't throw harem girl after harem girl.
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great great great great great great great great great great story
Love the story, so f**king good i've ever read. Not gonna lie, the overall include translation, setting, characters, and narrative are amazing!!Too good to skip this novel.
wow , very nice story with an excellent character development
История шикарная, пока я остановился на 15 главе но уже этого достаточно для того что бы понять как хорошо автор пишет о битвах и эмоциях, больше описаний битв еще осталось добавить и будет тогда еще лучше. Мало лишней болтовни все по существу и точные описание то от 3 лица то от 1 это очень освежает. Надеюсь обновления будут постоянно радовать нас.
Honestly, the author is way too fast paced with this story, they could have started slow, progressed the character and world development and then prepared Jarvis for the fight against the demon lord or whatever. It takes just a couple of chapters for Jarvis to win the fight and it takes even less time for him to develop better technology. Also, the system, it would have been better if he got knowledge rewards instead of straight up real people, it makes the story and effort shallow and the people feel soul-less. The characters as well feel a little shallow and empty, let them develop with more screen time or whatever is the equivalent.Overall, a great story concept and execution for a first try attempt, I assume. Just slow down to story and let it breath and settle a little.
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This read has been pretty awesome thus far! I am a huge fan for anything fantasy and monster related. I love that it keeps me on the edge of my seat and intrigued during every chapter. The author does an amazing job at giving enough details that allows you to create a visual of everything you are reading which makes it even better. Looking forward to more work from you!
So it basically raising and defecting his enemies are you sure it not there pride. I read so many of these books already I hope this one makes senses and not have a dozen woman.
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im split on this novel. the idea is good, the grammar is good, it is original well as original as system novel get but the execution not so much.the amount of chapters i skipped was a lot, 20-30 and the issue is that i could just seamlessly jump back in and i missed nothing.that is a major issue. it means the pacing of your story is crap and/or you are too descriptive on useless content. i wouldnt know i havent read it.this story feels like you read to the first taunt quest(ch15ish which can count as the prologue) and then jump to chapter 45 for the story to start. you need to make sure not to waste too many chapters on one event, you wasted way too many chapters on that especially when the main character isnt even doing anything, the mc itself is fine.