I will give this book a chance because it seems cool but the fact that you stated there will be multiple protagonists is a huge turn off, so if do have multiple protagonists, don't **** it up
first of all, don't make this cringe, and second of all give it some slice of life moment to enjoy the world and make the mc have some level of common sense,
don't make him like [ you dare to hit me now I kill you literary] don't make him have a harem, and most importantly don't make him unsatisfied with what he gains,
make him smart where he uses the most efficient way to increase his power,
don't give the skip training instant power moment, in this kind of novel progress of every moment make us happy and make him smart enough to finding new way to make him strong and earn some money.
if you are saying that it became suspicious then I will tell you some thing instantly attaining power is more suspicious and if he work other area and work on his power he will gain power and money and most importantly knowledge and experience.
I love the world the writer put us in in. It's also easy to get into the stories of each character. I recommend to give this a read. The beginning is a bit slow for me, but continue reading!
I think I have outdone myself with this Novel. I wanted to write something unique, fun, serious, and also realistic.
Like what would happen if massive trees grew out of the ground one day? Here is your answer. XD
My writing quality is lit.... 10/10
Stability of updates.... well things might look good right now, but I have a next novel I dedicate my time to so.... 7/10
Story Development... I plan to give this a real novel feel so 10/10
Character Design... I think I excel in this category, backstory, and everything links together so 10/10
World Background...Depending on how this novel does, I will create a map of the world for fans so 10/10
Note: This is a harem (somewhat). The relationships tend to get complicated but there will be no NTR. It will have a happy ending (somewhat). And just read and review your opinion.
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Only two chapters and yet one can still tell how much thought has been put in this story. The plot is suspenseful and nail-biting! I personally am addicted to this thriller and mystery genre so I'm no doubt addicted. The main character really draws me towards the background as well! I hope you publish more chapters soon!
The story is great! It has a lot of potential into it! I think this is going to be awesome in the future! So far, after reading the first few chatpers, I believe this novel is amazign! I commented the things that I think needs editting!
I'd like to note that the events felt a bit sudden. It would be fantastic if you could establish the narration first before placing the system. Let' say that the man was weak, like you've said, author. And in that world/village, violence was always the key. Survival of the fittest. Therefore, he needs to do something. It would be better to explain first the situation he was into. Let the thug beat him up. Show the main protagonist he was not meant to wield a gun, but in the end, he was the "top gunner" in the story. In that way, you can make the story more interesting! feel free to disagree, and these are only my suggestions~ Kudos for the author!
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We have a lot authors doing real good these days, huh! Anyways I really appreciate the style of writing and of course I would love to see more chappies soon.. There are a few mistakes but they don't really count...Dear fellow author you're already doing well.
Happy writing!!
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have not read the book but the other books the athur has made are great so...5 stars.I recommend reading monkey King before this so this book gets more chapters and you don't have to feel like you want to die waiting for chapters.also first