Great story so far. Looking forward to more, rated the world building at 4 because we still don't know much about it, but so far it's an amazing read with a unique view on the transmigration genre. The system, a.k.a. Lily, is great as well. Keep up the good work!
Hello, Author here, This is my first time writing a novel so I hope you like it. I know that there are a lot of improvements that I can make so I would appreciate it if you could write down what I can do to improve the story and give suggestions for the story.
I have read all the chapters that are free and ... What can I say? I have been fascinated with each chapter of this novel. I don't have enough words to describe how wonderful this novel is.
I can see the love you have given the novel. Keep it up.
Definitely a talented writer, that much is a given. This story starts off strong with excellent writing skills and character descriptions. Unfortunately, I'm not able to read for very long on a screen because it tends to hurt my eyes after a while, but I will definitely be coming back a couple times a week to check this story out.
Please don't. There are already to many of this kind of novel and this one makes the same mistakes the others make as well.
There is no character development because there is no struggle, at most the MC has to put in the minimum amount of work to lead a life of luxury.
There is no tension, no sense of excitement and no character interaction.
I have read the initial chapters and I like how the story is setup with a non-mainstream theme of 'Mafia'. The established world of the novel has lot of potential for exciting development. Also the main protagonist is neither OP nor to lack in power, with a good contrasting personality trait which give a plus point to this novel. If the author focuses on main story without much overloading the chapter with unimportant stuff, the novel will become much more exciting. It will definitely grew into top rank novel.
Where do you even get these ideas? The descriptions you did for the world background is so clean and detailed. I'm impressed! Great job, author-san!
Ahahaha, I have a soft spot for immortal people! Rino just wanted to die, but instead, he became an immortal set to build kingdoms from scratch by the slave drivers.. ahem.. the gods.
I like the synopsis and the first chapter. Destiny is a veteran author with great skills in storytelling. You are sure to enjoy a good story here. Do add it to your library!
I really liked the story, but it's impossible to read with all these grammar errors and poor editing. I feel it would be an easier fix than just having a bad story. I hope the author looks into getting either a better editor or get a programm checking the grammar
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Hey there!
Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact [email protected]. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.