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more more more more more more more more more more more more More more more more more more more more more more updates please i super love the story
Great story.
The background of the MC is quite usual, a low level individu without future is given a system helping him practice.
Not mutch to say for the future development of the story with only 20 chapters, but we can already guess we're it's coming to.
Chapter 20 killed my expectations of the novel. Early romance just makes me uncomfortable. A nuisance and liability to his safety and it's a hype kill for me. The kid fell in love with a stalker in 1 interaction and shes already as important to him as his family. Sigh.
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I don't know anything so I'm rating it as 5 stars. I want to read it but it seems as though this has been dropped.
You have a lot of points that need to be addressed.
1. Edit your work, smaller paragraphs are easier to read.
2. Personal speech, the way you currently handle things related to people speaking is very confusing and not reader friendly. Adding personal speech is really easy by marking what was said with "blablabla". Read popular novels and look how they structure interaction of characters.
3. Just in the first 2 chapters alone their are so many things wrong with logical thinking and game related stuff. For example, no one stays in a guild just because the guild leader says so, only idiots do that.
Or losing all Equipment and having to start from lvl 1 again, players don't have those powers ingame even gm's can't just take your equipment and reset your lvl.
There's so much wrong with just the first 2 chapters.
Good luck
this really is one of the best free novels I have ever read period; just everything about it the world building, the character development, the abilities, the power system, the quality of the writing itself everything is phenomenal!
the author is also very active in the comment section, which probably doesn't mean a lot since I was the only person in there but I always appreciate it when an author interacts with their audience.
(btw this is a re-release of the novel because webnovel glitched and the author couldn't release chapter for some reason, that's why you can't see my comments and why I'm so aware of the story)
i fricking love it ok it sooo good i ve been wanting to read smthing like this sooo goodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgoodgood
It's pretty good. I've read up to all the translated chapters at the time of this review. The narration is pretty good and it reminds me of novels such as Trafford's Trading Club with its premise.