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Overall it's pretty decent, with fun and likable characters and a somewhat interesting world. Though the dialogue feels bad since they talk exposition most of the time, it is still an enjoyable read.There are a few issues with the writing, as there are sometimes missing or misplaced commas, periods, apostrophes, and etc. Along with some missing words.Though it's not a big deal as I can still understand it, it does ruin the flow and takes you out of the book.I recommend using grammarly and a bit of proofreading.
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• Writing quality ? 3*There’s room for development. The writing looks too superficial and not deep at all. I can’t seem the be hooked by the story. The writing style is more descriptive than narrative. • Story development ? 3*A good directive line but with lot of inadequacies, doesn’t feel like how people normally react and behave in those described contexts and situations. A lot of surprising developments but the bad kind of surprises, or maybe very badly written. We don’t feel a sense of flow. The events feels rushed and not finished, we pass from one to another without a sense of cohesiveness. • Character Design ? 1*The author want so badly the MC to be calculative, smart, funny or intelligent. But it’s gross, disgusting and totally the opposite. There’s no consistency in his personality and so his actions. Sometime he’s dumb or smart, calculative or emotional. We expect here one reaction but it’s totally the opposite. I don’t understand this MC, I can’t identify myself in him. I’m not that dumb and incoherent as a person. • World Background ? 3*There’s so much potential in that world background but the author completely messed it. He don’t seems to use that potential. The quality of story messed up the background. I want to know more about that world but not how the author brings it to us.Overall, a big disappointment. It could have gone so much better. I don’t know the author, his experience and age. But it looks very very immature. Sorry ?
I like the story. Sure the grammar needs to be touched up but it is still readable. What gets me is the fact that the mc is so moronic!?? For a so called “#1” player the mc gets enraged by a small slight and that is ok he can get revenge when he gets stronger. The next day he immediately shows hostility and alerts the enemy even when he is far weaker in a lot of aspects. It’s just stupid. Why did I write this again? I don’t want to delete after I put so much time into this. ?u200d♂️
Overall, quite good; Pacing is great, and explanations of concepts doesn't seem overloaded. More characters would be nice, though, and maybe more fight scenes (if that's what you would like to go for). Also, really solid update schedule!Keep up the good work.
Have a lot of potential, It has so much room for development and many things to focus but why would Chinese propaganda and nationalism be in there? Too many trashy characters on Earth, at first it's bearable but in the later chapter it becomes too much. It's always the same formula, the Family of a player(rich) has this black sheep who is always against that player, when he is at his lowest, stable, and peak life.I really hope they just focus on conquering the universe and just give a glimpse of Earth. Not Central China is always the best. But before the player becomes a big hit they are just the 2nd strongest country. They deem Africa as lazy people, and India as an inferior race ( I forgot the other country). All other leaders are stupid unless that said leader is leaning towards being an ally of China.While I may be harsh toward any Earth scene. in which you can just skip and it will not impact the story that much. The other story where they build and conquer other people are fire. I will not talk about characters cause they really are not that good but still acceptable, especially the MC. Also, this type of genre or story is clearly loved by readers but it's always the one with the slow update and usually the one who dropped the novel. Like Boss Behind the game, Much better 300 chapters compare to this
Simply put if you like OP protagonists then our favorite author here is the perfect person. Love the work and can’t wait for another one of a kind OP mc.
Bad mc attitude. Very arrogantKing: “Can you really help us?” Tries to clarify if the legends are true and if he’s really worth it.Mc: “Wtf man, I just need all this stuff and I’ll solve your problems ok?” Doesn’t provide any info at all and leaves once the king showed hesitation.
So far, as a sneak peek novel, this is great. I look forward to being able to read more of it. Keep up the good work, author! I especially enjoy when he tells people to shut it hahaha