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I will start with the good then the bad. ------------Good: A very entertaining read. I enjoyed the story all the way. I would recommend anyone thinking of reading this to give it a try. I won't go too much into why it's good, just read other reviews for that. ---------------Bad: There are mainly 4 problems with this story: 1- Author had no vision for how the story would turn out and the process, only the concept/premise at the start was deliberate. This style of going impromptu and seeing where this goes without setting any short term goals nor long term goals for the story just makes it hollow. Author is following the whims of readers, If readers wanted skill he'll give skill. Problem here is that this causes plot holes and author has to add author notes to explain them and then along the chapters more plot holes appear and author again gives plausible explanations and we fall into a rabbit hole. Events or things that happened in past chapters aren't properly remembered in future chapters by auther. In future chapters when it's mentioned that this event happened, if you go back to that event then you find that it's wrong. Author didn't remember it right, so these future chapters will be built on a false memory.2- Author thoughts and pauses to story throughout chapters. You can tell author is new to writing since author has to explain in brackets why things happen and gives info dumps regularly, author didn't set the rules of the world beforehand, so he comes up with plausible explanations for world rules or events as the story goes. Honestly it just takes me out of the immersion in the story. 3- Characters have bad character design. Only Lia and Riya stayed true to their design, but others not so. How? At the start, every character is shown with his personality clear, an arrogant guy, a narcissist guy, an emotionless guy, a sadistic guy, and so on. The problem comes when we progress in the story, without any gradual changes, they suddenly display weird characteristics and everyone acts as if they were like that from the start. and don't tell me that's love working its magic. Love influences but doesn't change the core personality of someone. especially when that love was there long before the changes, for example, A sadistic guy that's used to being at the top of the world with everyone respecting him like the king that didn't talk much suddenly is a meathead and acts like a puppy and doesn't mind others not respecting him, If it's gradual then I'd understand, but it happened in one chapter. Same goes for Liam, he was the quiet type and smart and calculating, but then suddenly he teases and says stuff only friends of years would say.It just feels author is making them all turn out to be that silly friend group with no prior indication, these changes happen suddenly. No character development. just some lines explain that, like "you've already told me that more than 50 times in our last few hangouts
there's something wrong with MC brain in my opinion, his previous body owner dead because of murder, and after he gain system and small gain in cultivation he flaunt his beautiful mom, sister, maid around city. it's like asking for trouble. it's cliche story most protagonis donkey brain in novel and he doesn't realize he's source of trouble itself.
Wowww..I feel like I'm a baby when I read this hehe ... I was really surprised if I experienced it hihihi ...Recommended!!⊂(◉‿◉)つ⊂(◉‿◉)つ⊂(◉‿◉)つ⊂(◉‿◉)つ⊂(◉‿◉)つ⊂(◉‿◉)つ⊂(◉‿◉)つ
Percy Seacrest...you have an amazing story going here. From the MC, to the storyline and character specifications, everything is well thought out and realistic.The world building has a lot of potentials which you could harness as you go on. I would love to know what would happen from here. More updates for me.
Pls don’t drop, it is a realy good book
it was good at first but when he picked that class warrior i stopped reading.
In my opinion the story is very good. My only issue with it is that it is too heavily focused on the relationship. If the author would add more background and plot the story would be amazing.
The story is suspenseful awesome horror thriller story with many characters.the story also contains the specification of the places situations which makes the story more realistic.
An interesting twist on the old reborn into my younger self story line. This story has alot of promise in it's future.
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After adding this story to my library and reading more, I decided to review again. I can't lie , I'm not familiar with systems and all but this book got me hooked. This is a genre am not familiar with but your story piqued my interest