so far I like it 5
Haven't read it yet but I'mma rate you five stars for that wonderful synopsis, may you have all the donations you need venerable primordial being........................................................................... ....
Need *** sence ilke bdsm mode or torture or bondage.
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This novel is amazing you must try it.
This novel is amazing you must try it.
This novel is amazing you must try it.
This novel is amazing you must try it.
This novel is amazing you must try it.
This novel is amazing you must try it.
Honestly the story was great even though the grammar is more strange than my English of my own novel but good brown keep it up ,and PAHH !-
The story plot is good and characters design as well but but the way you write the convo and the person who converse made me confused maybe because its different form from what i have usually read. But this is only my opinion and so far its quite interesting. More power to you and write more
Each chapter is less than 500 characters.
Read a couple of chapters and nothing remotely interesting is happening.
No world building, no character dept. The only thing that we know is his age and dream.
Most of the chapters are like reading a movie script.
My advice. Pour more effort in each chapter, make it longer, more meaningful.
Your grammar is okey to read.
Instead of making a list of things to do, make it him saying what he needs to do, why and a backup plan if that doesn't work out(Don't you make it like that in your head in your daily life ?)
I will come back later, hope you fix the problems :)
when i read the synopsis i felt like lord of mysteries, idk man I hope it is good......................................................................
This is an interesting novel. I have read a lot of books but this is very interesting novel. Thanks Mr. Oscar Simon Alyao for such a master piece, and indeed I expect more from you.
i love the characters so far especially kate
For a reference I read what was free. The grammar is ok with minor errors here and there. The story hasn’t really taken off for me yet but it is progressing slowly. In the free chapters the class system isn’t really explored by the MC. He has no skills or abilities yet either. He also hasn’t used the dagger he found even though he is aware it is special, where is the gamers curiosity? He also took a while to use his SP after lvling up. The readers also get a hint about vampires and the other country having them in the real world but nothing else about the stories main story line. The MC also doesn’t seem to have anything special about him or unique to make him stand out yet. I do like how he killled NPCs to lvl up like a true assassin. Also I would stop repeating your last chapter in the next one even if it doesn’t effect the cost readers will interpret it as doing so. Hope your story does good in the future.
it's a nice fan faction story about migrating into a world with knowledge from old world but the jokes are corny not very funny, example a girl has ice powers, so he asks her can you sing let it snow from Frozen, it comes off like dad jokes so kills the story.