Good
good story good character development i give it a 4 but it would be a 5 if there wasn't so many misspelt word
This author desperately needs a editor. The grammar here is horrendous. Bordering on illegible. Otherwise it has a good premise, story might need some fine tuning, like an introduction to the character maybe? or some developement to help you understand where he came from and where he is going BEFORE his death. So you understand him and his time before the travel earlier on in the story. Overall, i suggest getting someone to fix the writing for the author. But keep up the work, its possible to make it better, looking forward to it.
The premise of the novel is good. Writing could be improved. Biggest drawback is that the MC is too OP making it a bit unappealing to read.
My honest review, you have a very good style, especially for the dialogues, they are fluid and believable (more than mine I'm afraid), good grammar and the general style is easy to read, pleasant, without long paragraphs or unnecessary descriptions.
However, in the development of the story there is a lack of bait to hook the reader. Beyond the introduction of the character, the first chapters have the reader a little lost as to where the story is going.
Likewise, since they are well written, I recommend that you make a prologue with the important moment or the twist that keeps the reader's attention.
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This novel is hilarous I love how he calls himself the immortal and acts like a boss I also like how people just think hes crazy I also like the fact that the system makes him do things that are funny as well I hope the author continues to update this and continues to make me laugh :D
Such a great novel, what a pleasant surprise.
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Read it. . .
Just read it, you won't be disappointed I swear!
This is Interesting more than i think. I got here by the Manhua and I I kinda love the Manhua(even though it only has 7 chapter till now) but even though I am loving this....
Well, where to begin... It certainly won't be a novel for everyone. Both the title and the beginning may discourage many people, but I think it's worth giving the author a chance because the last chapters are really great and give hope that the novel will be really good.
Personally, I like how the author presents the relationships between the characters. The relationship between MC and Violetta (definitely the best female character of the series) deserves special praise. I hope that in future chapters we will have the opportunity to see her more often.
From the comments of other people I can conclude that the author presents the fight scenes very well. Personally, I usually skip half of the description, so in this matter I can only rely on the opinion of others, and they are very positive.
As far as the quality of writing goes, I have no major complaints. Reading other noveles on the site, this one is certainly well above average.
To sum it all up, objectively the novel deserves4 - 4.5 stars (with a lot of potential). However, I give 5 because of Violetta.
don't drop it plz cause this is one of my favorite novel I can't wait to read more of the chapters so please don't drop it