This author desperately needs a editor. The grammar here is horrendous. Bordering on illegible. Otherwise it has a good premise, story might need some fine tuning, like an introduction to the character maybe? or some developement to help you understand where he came from and where he is going BEFORE his death. So you understand him and his time before the travel earlier on in the story. Overall, i suggest getting someone to fix the writing for the author. But keep up the work, its possible to make it better, looking forward to it.
