*Writing Quality: Excellent, not too complicated to hush you away, not too simple to make you believe it's mediocre, it draws you in and tells the story without much effort, great grammar.
*Stability of Updates: As a new novel it is still not following any rigorous schedule.
*Story Development: I only read the first chapters until the story began, and it was described and written well enough to allow me to relate with the MC, the parents, the friend and his situation as to why he would enter the game at all, however, perhaps because I haven't dwelled further it's difficult for me to understand what makes the game special, he received a message saying if he was bored of his life, but what does the game offer? and why would he encounter it in a private message rather than a poster in the streets, the game isn't public? etc.. etc... it lacks a point of inflexion that would attract readers in my opinion.
Like that small thing that makes your novel unique, this, however, doesn't mean it's mediocre, this point of inflexion could appear in the future.
*Character Design: So far I have seen MC some of the in-game characters, even interaction between NPCs and they're loyal to one another.
*World Background: The entire premise envelops the game and I haven't delved further into the game to accurately judge whether it is deep enough or lacking, but I'm truly unable to understand what makes the game especial, supposing it allows you to get money in the real world, is that really it?
Overall in my personal opinion, find myself with confused emotions regarding this novel, for one the structure is solid, grammar is perfect, description of events happens fluently, the in-game elements or representation of the UI in words is also properly laid on, but the premise is weak, it lacks a deterministic point which will attract readers to stick with it rather than keep scrolling.
The cover also needs some improvements, overall I give it a high score because unlike most novels in this site, this is the total opposite, some of them have interesting premises but due to lack of skill they're destroyed either by bad grammar or a world that's not properly structured, etc...
In this case, the world is properly structured, the grammar is perfect, but the world itself is weak and doesn't lead to anything that would attract (at least me) to read further because I can envision MC perhaps completing some quests and getting strong, beating a boss and obtaining loot, gaining money in real life, perhaps that's not how you want it to be, and instead plan something bigger for him, but that's how I perceived it with several short chapters and you need to portray that as well for them before the reader departs.
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I honestly like your story.... everything is lovely...... overall it's the best intimatcy harem beauties and I like there passionate connection.... The word building is very detailed and easy to understand.✌️
I have one question for the author. Why does the MC continue to show off so much strength despite his circumstances. Firstly, he’s only a 2-star talent so he should have a much slower growth rate. Does it not make sense that no one has questioned his significant behavioural change, eye colour change and super strength that happened all of a sudden?Another thing is why does he not wear contact lenses or at least glasses? Purple eyes being distinctive characteristics of void-walkers should be enough for him to make cautious decisions. It’s so easy to wear some lenses but this guy has still not done so. Is there something preventing him from doing it? Not only that, doesn’t him abrupt killing intent not surprise people at all. Like he uses his aura and intent to suppress monsters and people, is that not the least bit suspicious for a complete beginner?Also, doesn’t his 4d (ability) make him much more rational? Wouldn’t that mean he would take better precautions and make safer decisions. One comment asked about whether he even needs to join an academy in the first place. All he has to do is spam dungeons and void walks. I agree with this and am wondering why he needs to join in the first place. All in all, I think this is a good story but the MCs characters seems to there just for the convenience of the plot. I just wish he could be more low-key, especially when he’s literally one of the most wanted people in the universe.
Great book, author's writing skill is really good along with the story, quite interesting and a very easy read, good job author and good luck
the book is great, but the translators after they split 1 chapter into 6 or 12 pieces are just trash
Translation and updating stability are a 5 everything else is a 3. Right off the bat let’s start with the MC, the MC isnt stupid or dull by any stretch of the imagination. Fairly smart tbh in how he acts. The only issue is that his character as well as everyone else in this novel needs to be fleshed out just a little more. World background is okay. It’s easy to understand but not amazing in any aspect.All around a decent book to pass the time with and has the chance to be a diamond in the rough provided the author works hard to improve.
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I’ve been seeing a couple of reviews bashing the mc for being to cautious or not having the demeanor of an immortal cultivation and my reply to that is people like that won’ last a second in the cultivation world where a father can kill his child for talent or a mother can sell her child for benefits and keep in mind the mc has the biggest benefit that any cultivator chases that is eternal life, so yes he will hide and take his time, yes he won’t have the demeanor of an immortal cultivator and yes he is for sure not going to get himself killed and refined into a pill just so he can prove he is a big boy that everyone needs to respect and eternal life makes you a hermit by default because all those you care about will die and live you alone so excuse the mc for just chilling in the prison.Now for the proper review: the story is actua quite interesting and has an mc with a good head on his shoulder as well as a not so outrageous cheat which makes it all the more fun to read but the only problem I have with the story is the translation some words I have no idea what them mean because they are in Chinese and I just have to brush past it but I’ some chapters the translator provides the meaning at the end so that good…..well that’s the end of my review. Apologies if it is to amateur
I really like where this story is going. I’m looking forward to the next chapters and where the future of this story will take us.I really like this book keep up the good work!
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I actually like how this book is. It has a clear plot which is easy for the readers to understand. Best of luck for the author and this book.
A really Great Novel, that I love to read!
Good grammar and Story is to be expected.
The Story has very emotional moments and the Author brings out the Characters and their feelings very good!
I hope to see more !
Thanks for the hard work :D