Note: I only read 4 chapters.
It felt like I was watching a case study in my crim course. The protagonist was chilling to read about, not because descriptions were detailed but due to his reckless decisions and lack of stress in the moment of crime.
Despite being written in first person there are actually a lot of points that go unexplained. Decisions are told to the reader then acted upon, not really elaborated on further. It’s a missed chance to get to know the protagonist’s thought process more.
Contrary to my previous comment, I think the author has fallen into a trap that you can easily fall into when you write in first person—telling rather than showing. The beginning of the prologue is a good example, there are clearly a lot of emotions but it’s mostly being expressed though monologue. It ends up looking like a rant someone tweeted rather than words in a novel. Describing using literary devices like similies and metaphors can go a long way.
Grammar wasn’t terrible, just missed some capitalization of words after the end of a dialogue and a few contradicting use of tenses. At one point there was a section that written in past, present, then past again even though it was referring to the same period in time.
I wish you the best on the rest of the novel, Author!
Goood story
This is an interesting novel, different from the ones we usually read or find here I hope this gets picked most of the novels that get picked are not that good.
I love the back ground of the story. The excitement in the story starts from the very first chapter and draws you in. The writting quality and character development is amazing. Great work!!
This is just bad.
A lot of things don't make senses.
For an mc who regress to the past is very stupid.
The plot holes are too many.
Plus the author kills the story by giving the mc all that op talents.
very interesting. can anyone say the raw name please ,
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This could easily be in the top 20 on this site if it had an editor. The plot is well formed, as far as I have read, and the characters are interesting. Still, English is obviously not the first language of the author. There are a significant amount of extremely common mistakes such as using the wrong words, getting plurals wrong, incorrect sentence structures, missing words, missing commas, run on sentences, incorrect tense, etc...
It also doesn't help that the cover implies some sort of multiple personality story and synopsis doesn't really explain anything. Overall this is a good read assuming you can ignore the quality of the prose itself.
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Landing a review after reading chapter 92. Looos like i was right to endure the beginning. The author did say the beginning was going to be trash, so i took his word and clutched through them. But when it did get around the middle it started being interesting, the beginning was hella interesting as well but the execution lacked.
Butal as the story went on, it started increasing and increasing and right now i was on the edge of my seat as i read you latest 5 chapters.
How the well did you start writing like that?? Like seriously the writing is vwry good when i read the latest chapter.
I won't be like others and give you a chance. Please update the beginning with the same level of writing you are writing now and show them what you can do.
This really has potential to be one of the best. I believe in you writer. Hope you find your rhythm and good luck for the exams. Dont putntoo much pressure on yourself because of these idiots not able to go through the entire book, they'll return once you actually start editing..
You can start doing that in your free time or when your exams are over. We do want our writer to pass after all
Good writing, story flow and characters.
Instresting plot thus far. good use of portraying the evolving psychological mindset of the MC
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I really like MC
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