Story starts off great, but...
I came and saw the tags, such as #harem.
I can say from the start when I started reading till chapter 17 that it should focus more on the MC because some readers just want to know on how the harem would usually start until it really becomes a 'harem'. This strange thought came to my mind that the male side characters were the harem of the MC, because the early chapters already started simultaneously detailing and focusing on the MC and the Side characters.
Introduction of side characters came out quicker than what I thought, you could've just started slow with one. Other side characters at the start doesn't really give that much support in the start story of the MC.
The story hooked me but stopped me from reading when the 2 male side characters started showing up, what is this? is this drama where a love triangle starts then goes to pentagon then octagon, so on...
I just skimmed and scanned and was too lazy to actually read because wherever I stop and try to actually read, it starts in a place where the side character shows up.
This gives vibes of Western and Eastern novel mixed together, that it makes me irritated when I think the about the negative points of both types of novel in one novel.
I would like to continue reading, but giving this review, it's time for me to move on and go to other novels.
- Still rooting for improvement
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What a great start. Nice mix between dark comedy and typical cultivation Troupes. Just hope to see more.
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While I will admit to being a bit confused on how exactly the system works I do like the overall concept - being able to improve a cultivation method/skill. I've always wondered about who creates skills in the first place and this is touching on that a bit.But I also like MC. He's obviously a kind and doting 'father' but he is sufficiently ruthless to his enemies which I like. Clean kills are great. Nice start to this book!
I really like this concept...............................................................................................................................
Story so far is pretty meh, but the translator sucks, got to chapter where he's buying a weapon and the translator is switching freely between the word knife, sabre and longsword, like they're all the same thing, in one paragraph the same weapon was called both a knife and a longsword.If the translator is too inept at the English language that they can't get the weapons right, they have no business charging for translations, god knows what sort of other mistakes they make.
I love this novel!! You got me hooked already in the first chap and forced me to binge the rest! If this keeps up I might start spending on patreon for the first time ever!
Can't wait to find out what will he do to make the girl stay. Keep it up author. Looking forward to know the answer. Love it. Highly recommend.
I like the story....................................................................................................................................
Honestly either my favorite book or second favorite. Close tie with Reincarnation of Strongest Sword God. Author seems to take extreme care to edit out his typos and fix any grammar issues so it's a very smooth read. If you like a villain or anti hero MC then this book is definitely for you, as the MC is easily one of my top fave characters out of multiple books.