It is a very good imagination and good character building. You need to work on the sentence formation for the next chapters. You have really improved in the third chapter. Good work keep it going.......
Author here, it's hard to make an exemption on my mistakes here so I'm criticized my book too. I rather want to be truthful to myself that trying to lie. By the way thanks to those who still look at this book, promise it'll be good of you still wait.
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a lot of face slapping around here [img=faceslap]
he was the first to arrive so he has a lot of opportunities to rise quickly
waiting because they are taking a break.
it got me addicted!
looks Guys i want say too much if you think the story is not good it's ok but i just tell you are going to miss something because . there maybe some lack at the start but later you will understand
It's a perfect example of a novel full of plotholl.You just need to read first 5 chapter to know what I mean............
The story was about the do-over of the MC. A captivating plot that made me touched by the storyline itself. This is something that many of us relate to. Wanting to restart again to correct or not do again caused our regrets. Story development at its finest. Five stars!
It was my first English novel, so there would be a lot of flaws in it. If you think this novel readable then please continue, but if you think the English in the novel is too bad to interrupt your reading pleasure, then stop reading.
English is not my mother tongue, but one of the ways to improve English is to keep writing and reading. Because it's hard for me to improve English if I have to stop writing this novel.
The background of this novel is an alternate reality with references of players from the real world. I apologize if there any fan of a club or a player was offended by my writing.
sisters of the corn support the author and read this amazing novels and keep up the good work.
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It pretty average.
It started off interesting and funny but later on it started to get boring and generic.
Story also started to divert from the main theme of the novel which is making wine.
Great novel. Probably the best of a few batches of trial reads.
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It's good. The writing is decent (but could be improved). The story is focused on romance (which is always welcomed). His disciples aren't all or majority females who are in love with him (which I noticed a lost of these kind of stories have a tendency to do). He's not overt with his abilities though that might not be for long considering this latest chapter. The cultivation is very convoluted and confusing. Why didn't they just go with the generic cultivation system.
One annoying thing is how the writer keeps on shoving it in your face that the MC is a genius. "but of course Li blah blah is x100 time more talented so his cultivation and learning is way faster so he learnt this in half a day even though it would take them years" on repeat. Keep in mind they are talking about so called S and SS-class talents. I'm just waiting for the story to introduce SSSSS-class talents at this point. This talent system is going to become redundant at some point honestly.