I like the feel of it, it can become some nice story but one ****** clique can ruin this, since it seems you have taken heavy inspiration from japanese novels beware of being your avarage weeb s h i t.
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The first chapter leaves good impression but for the love of god please simplify your status. I know you are trying to make a good game as well as a good story but enough is enough have a good time writing.
[Its your novel thanks for reading this.]
Good
Too cliche story, don't waste time on it.
Mc is master of disciples and also has system. So system magically provides back all the resources that mc used on his disciples, and they all become very strong. And for stupid reasons, protagonists mentioned by system, are all stupid..
So dont waste time on this.
Muy divertida además de sucesos muy rápidos y no no hay por ahora partes de relleno tonto aunque le falta un gran harem, el protagonista está muy desesperado por subir de nivel y conseguir nuevas recompensas
Slow progress, I don't mind it but if you're going to keep making it slow you should update a lot of chapters regularly it's hard to get hooked on it if you do it this way.Lastly, I like the plot
When I first started to read this novel, I was really enjoying it. The premise was overused but not too over the top. There were a lot of regular cliche's like "trash young master" and "reincarnated with past memories", but overall, it had a nice feel to it. The thing that sunk the ship for me was how cringe-worthy all the interactions are. It's like this author decided to turn everything into a 70's slapstick comedy show. I feel like I'm watching Full House when I read this. Every single thing that can be misunderstood, will be misunderstood. Everything that can go wrong, will go wrong. It's so bad to the point that you have to be on guard when the MC even walks out his bedroom casually for a ****** nonsensical reason, **** can and will hit the fan at the drop of a hat with little to no reason or cause. It's a huge turn-off. Obviously, a lot of time and effort went into planning the novel out, it has a clear story, that, while not very unique, also isn't bad. The problem is that the feel of the story is so far on the opposite end of serious that none of it has any actual weight, the entire novel feels like a joke, and that's because every single action made is so completely ridiculous that the only quality left is humor. I read novels like Perfect World and Gate of God, these novels have shameless main characters, they're shameless in retarded ways where you can't be mad at them because they're a combination of stupid, uninformed, arrogant, and aloof all the same time. It's annoying and stupid to read about their interactions with people and the misunderstandings that happen for no other reason but to satisfy the authors retarded desire to add random **** into their novel. This novel is exactly like that, except it's not just the main character, it's the entire fucking story. It doesn't matter if the MC can blow up mountains with a single punch, or dodge sword skills that would have Kakashi tongue-tied. If the author want's the mc to slip on a banana peel, the mc will slip on that banana peel. I find this incredibly annoying and unentertaining to read. Of course, slight comedic relief and humor are needed, but when you go THIS far, it's ridiculous. I understand that I've used some far-reaching analogies here, but I feel like most people can understand what I'm getting at. Overall, I'm really disappointed. It seems like every novel is either super ******** bloodthirsty where the MC pulls up the roots whenever someone even looks at him funny, or the novel is so slapstick ridiculous that it's not entertaining to read. Why can't authors find a balance between light-hearted humorous interactions and cold-blooded awesomeness? All of that being said, this is an original novel and even though I am severely disappointed with the story, it's still knees and waist above every other original novel. There is no comparison. The grammar is awesome, I have no trouble reading any of it, which is a very high compliment considering some of my previous reviews. There's no long-winded ancient Chinese mystical nonsense about random religions or practices, so that's always a plus. If we go by grammar, sentence structure and such, it's a 10/10 hands down for me. If we go by story, it's a solid 4/10, I'm very disappointed with how much lack of seriousness went into this novel.
i dont care,even if it stolen..but pls continue to update,i love this story..
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https://***.patreon.com/puddles4263/posts here is the link to the original story posted on Patreon by the real author. https://***.royalroad.com/fiction/11209/the-legend-of-randidly-ghosthound Here is where the fake copied it from the real author who willing put it up for free. His name is Puddles4263, he is the legend, you are just a sad rip off artist... stop it
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Nice Fantasy Novel
It’s great, but for those of us football fans I’ll recommend The Greatest Of All Times: Tales Of The Floater
Ok i thought it would be dumb but its actually pretty interesting just the first chapter! Cant wait for story to progress and im not a paid reviewer or anything if you check my reviews you will see im actually a picky reader with a wide range of genre. And i actually find this one to be interesting!
Only on the early chapters so far but I am really enjoying the story it has the perfect mix of dark moments and comedy