Fairly good. Hope it gets picked up........................................................................................................................
Arthur please edit the earlier chapters and fix the formatting it's a chore reading it, I'm sure you could find a proofreader if you asked for one.
The story so far has been really good. I've been hooked for the last couple of hours and thoroughly enjoyed it. Keep up the great work girl.
Just gonna leave this here for the few who I've noticed having trouble following some aspects of the series. Following this, you will notice that MC, does not seem to have certain 'knowledge' of the future despite the so-called 'going back twice' and 'starting' over.
All of this is for a reason, and I will say it here, it won't be answered anytime soon, so you will have to either try and read through the various clues I will post in my chapters and piece together the puzzle over time. Or wait until the story has arrived at that point, I can guarantee that the plot this will be interesting at the very least :)
I am a person that does not like to put too many unnecessary words in my chapters, so most times, if people are talking or an important character is saying something it will hold some type of key information or meaning to give context about something, world-building, or a secret. I like giving my readers stuff to ponder over and not spoon-feed them, that way it can create more engagement with the story and readers rather than me saying, 'Bam and that happens because he gives him that spoon which was so obvious in that scene, but I am saying it again because I believe NO ONE ELSE could have noticed it, right?' - this right here that I see many authors doing is no different from treating your readers like children as if they can't figure things out on their own.
Another, though the MC has only some 'memories' of a 'certain' life in the following chapters. It is natural as he is but only a human, no human is going to remember what you ate for breakfast 10 years ago, said to your father on this day 10 years or did for the entire day.
With that said have a happy reading guy, story, although is apocalypse biased, has heavy mystery elements and action, just a word of warning to those who don't like either of those things.
Great story, i recommend to read it
It's kinda hard to read first in earlier chapters because of information dump and introduction flow (plus it's making it more hard to read because of kinda low quality translation).
It's got interesting idea about the game itself. Not game that goes to every dungeon to just kill mobs, but has multiple games to play from the 'homeland' that player can choose.
It's getting better the more the story progress.
The MC is calm and clever, also has his own idea to do something.
Maybe just like other novel, many girls will be near the MC (either from teammates, got recommend from elderly, got rescued, and so on). I just hope it's not harem, but let's see how the story progressed.
I enjoyed reading this. I read the entire thing in one sitting up to the latest chapter. I love the character, I especially like that he is intelligent, his attitude makes me like him, Seujoon is a perfect example of a character that you cannot hate. There is also how it is kind of similar to The Legendary Mechanic in that the MC becomes an NPC but he still lives in reality. Overall, I love it. I hope you keep up the great stuff!
Really interesting story i have read so far.. I can't stop myself from reading and looking forward for a new chapter everyday. Wish the writer could have mass release.
HELL YEAH! its finally being translated. I have been keeping up with the comics but finally!!! We are so behind but it finally translated! Also mc is super op but has very cool interesting powers.
The story requires some proofreading. Other than that, the plotline is well-written, and it's unique in its own ways. Keep up with the good work!!
There are quite a few... negatives, should we say, to this story. I'm not saying it's intrinsically bad but by stating you think the quality is there, you've opened up a can of worms. I think you've got a solid base but you need an editor and some quality time thinking over your work. I've only read the first chapter and I'm bothered by it's foundation.
Most of your world background is going to come from the places your character travels to and as well, we don't have any background at first at all, even in the first chapter, on the world that the MC leaves behind.
Your character design is too bland for my tastes. A character called Alex, the hero of heroes with a system, it seems too Mary Sue. At least you've made him younger, that gives him room to grow. I like that idea.
The overall quality is a little subpar. I mean, it's 100 times better than most xinxia novels on this platform simply because the content is actually digestable but it could use some work. I'd suggest running over it and ironing out the kinks, for instance the constant use of the characters name. You can call him 'Alex' or use his last name, use the word boy, youth, teenager, or just not need to include his name at all.
Your updates are regular, that's fantastic, I'll give you that.
Overall, it's a solid novel but you have a rocky foundation. Whilst I haven't read past the first chapter, I can see the allure of the novel.
Now this! Is a story. So intriguing, so exciting, so well detailed. Author you did a good job on this book. Looking forward to more thrilling chapters. **, I'm definitely in love with Seker. Sorry Bethel ??
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