Hey, got to say that this is a good novel. However, I noticed that there are some inconsistency. For example, the MC contradicting himself (chapter 24). Another example, MC's first meeting with the novel's original MC. The interaction ended awkwardly and were a bit abrupt with the MC's response. Other than a few bits and nitpicking those, the overall story is interesting and have a sense of story flow. Also, a last bit of advice to improve the story is by making a story map. The story map doesn't need to be fully or well made, the story map must be able to guide the story direction. That's it for this review.
Stopped on chapter 15, this novel is extremely creative and is good at having you wonder about the world/mc, however, it is hard to immerse yourself in due to its serious need of an editor. If English isn’t your first language it might be your cup of tea. Had to give world building a 3/5 as not really anything has been explained as of yet. Gave character building a 4/5 because the side characters are decently fleshed out thus far except for a few minor details. I believe with an editor both issues can be easily recitfied.
I really love it I thought that it is a really good concept and the quality’s really good❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
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