Simple is better! Do not use big words and verbs in tenses that don't make sense! Even a comma can stop the flow of the story, and here it does. Please stop using big words just to show your vocabulary! It makes the story so hard to read. Cut the words that are put there to fill the page. It is a wonderful story with amazing potential but the writer has to realize that a phrase has rhythm. You block that rhythm with complicated words, commas that are missplaced or verbs in tenses that make no sense. A story is like a river. It has parts where it rages - that is where the reader gets to read faster, action is at the peak and you just want to know more! At the same time the river has parts where it is calm. Here the reader feels like wrapped in a cocoon of fluffy words. The immersion in the story happens here because this leads to the action! so please try harder.
Immersive and wholesome. Those are the two words they come into my mind while reading this book. Right from the beginning the author just builds up this amazing world that comes to life as you continue reading. I highly recommend this book to everyone
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This review is based until chapter 70.
The story is really slow. the grammar is ok except the author doesn’t know how to use the correct pronoun. he keeps on using ‘they’ or ‘their’ when he’s only referring to a single person. this usually confuse me because i always thought that he was talking about a group of people.
He also keeps on referring to other chars as noble this noble that, half elf this half elf that. It should be a name in order for us to remember who is who. for me there’s a lot of filler chapters in here. the mc seems to be like a minOr char here. tImothy seems to be the mc here. i dont know.
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This story has a heart and brain of its own. The author has really let all the realistic feelings combined with each other. Being a writer myself, I know the essence of a good storyline and this story has something that attracts all good writers to it. I personally recommend this book to all the writers who want to shine bright in the history of writing. May God keep you long alive, true appreciation from the bottom my heart, you truly are a blessing to writers like me.
another good book on transmigration and cultivation. but it had different concept which is fun to read, Mc Ku Lo is a caring person as he was still worried about his sister, waiting to be further updates. good work author
I am halfway through but I think i need to review it ASAP to let all readers know that this one this really good!! I love genres like this and truly this one is amazing! Good work Author! Keep it up!
I am enjoying this tale for its creative use of pop culture and ancient mythos. The main characters are developing nicely and the plot moves on without becoming stale.
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A neat school story that starts with an ungrateful girl and some unlikely friendships. The author has a few rough patches of text but it's still quite readable and enjoyable. I'll be catching up to the rest.