"You!"
The storyline is ok, charcters are lively, but there is still missing some thrill along the way. Since this is quite like a vampire story, it should leave a remark to readers.. put a lot of suspense for the characters, while plotting romance since this is a romance novel.
Mel continued channeling the transformation, ignoring the other's words until she felt her meridians 'fully flexed'.
Suddenly I felt a tremor and spun around. Min's eyes were glowing as chairs began to float around him.
Grinning wickedly, Garet raised his hand then began to speak loudly, "after the drill practice is finished. I and Lie will go sparing, you can watch it as learning material."
"Oi! Stop acting like I'm a pervert-!"
“Ha ha ha ha…”
Not going to lie, it's the MC that kills this one for me. I have seen case studies on children raised by wolves and this boy is worse than that. He was raised by years by a man who taught him basic skills, but that also means he was socialized to an extent. Since the story started the MC has been in society at least virtually for 3 years, yet he is still acting like a total savage? nah, unless he actually has a mental illness or a developmental disability there is no way this dude is this clueless to human interaction. I am sure it was intended to be humorous and/or edgy, but it absolutely detracts from the story.
This Novel sat in my Library for quite a while because of the negative comments ... a month ago I thought about giving it a shot ... it's true the writing quality is bad but it has improved a bit with time. Character development took OKish but it still requires quite a brushing ..... But the most disappointing thing is the use of Heavy Plot Armours .. repeatedly.. Certain bets and terms /deals were used according to the wordings " you have to follow every command of mine / I will own everything you have if I win " and people readily agrees ( People are not that stupid and these are not ordinary people who we are talking about but powerhouses! ) without thinking the pros-cons of such a deal . Take example of Yanagi , a senior at his institute and most the powerful youth , readily agreed to the term " you will obey every command ... " if one could interpret , it is similar to a slave contract ! , ( My words ) , it should be properly mentioned what " everything" means in this novel - everything could include ones money , property , Mana Fruits , and Weapons but it can also include ones time , body , soul , his wife / husband and family... a clear cut defination is Very much required .. And don't talk about the Plot Armours... if one is giving it a try.... they will surely understand what I mean ...While the chapters are relased frequently , this story is not my Cup of tea ...Dropping it ..
Great book hope it gets more chapters soon.
interesting start , i expect more and continue the work
Author here.✌ I just want to thank all you for reading my novel. Really thanks to everyone who votes and comment as it helpss me a lot!❤ English is not my mother tongue, so I hope you will forgive me for my grammatical errors and misuse of words sometimes.? I hope to improve more and more to give you a good story. Thanks again to everyone, and hopefully, you enjoy it as much as I enjoy writing.?????