avataroftheking, good to see you back.
We headed out the gymnasium as soon as we settled everything. We like to take a walk this day though we're actually in hurry. Seojoon oppa can wait. We dropped by the nearest bakeshop to buy Seojoon Oppa's birthday cake and his fifty-second candle, I mean, twenty-fifth. We were halfway to our house when I remembered I forgot to pick up the flowers posted on my locker.
"I will thank her later, but first we need to start our Mission." Adam open the Shopping Window and buy a black Ball Cap and white Rubber Gloves.
"Hush my son, I'm here. I will protect you,"
The chapters are short but this is the best story EVER !!! In a day I manage to read all the chapters and i still can’t get over the fact that she is a kid ??
I'd hoped you'd use speech marks for ease identification of direct speech
good and engaging , interesting characters
This is definitely one of the best written novel I've read, but is one of the most addicting for sure. Great plot and character development. Some says that mc is beta or whatever which I totally disagree. Can't wait to see how it goes.
Overall, this novel is decent but there are a few issues.First is, the author explains too much. There's too much explanation about some new building and how it works. Some are unnecessary and some can be said as it is. Second, the fact that the MC dealt with no issues with the citizens apart from the fact that they're too weak is unrealistic. People get jobs and suddenly, they're happy and no problems occurred afterwards. In every place, there are always problematic people. Drunkards for example. There were even no mention of thievery in Dry City, as if everyone just turned obedient conveniently for the MC. Even if every single one of them got jobs, some habits, while they can be dealt with, they don't die easily. Mass migration from people of different places should have introduced some problems but for some reason, they were obedient. Also, the fact that people from other places could successfully migrate to the Black Plain without leaving any traces is also quite unrealistic. If it's the soldiers, then there would be no issues but civilians are hard to control, especially when they weren't yours or when the cultures are different. There is also the lack of skepticism. Although the author tried to explain this part, the fact that the whole population of a city just disappears and migrates to the Black Plain is quite unrealistic. No one stayed behind, especially the old people, who are (not all) supposed to be the most stubborn and difficult to persuade. I'm still currently on chap 371 so the author might have already addressed these on the not so recent chapters but even if he still hasn't, I hope the author reads this for improvement. Overall, this novel is, as I said, decent and full of potential.
it has a great potential and storyline. But i think each chapter is too short. i hope author would make changes to this
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Different from the usual run of the mill cultivation novels where the MC fully showcases his"talent" and even more. A different world view from usual ones too.