Sorry Exp ......
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Note to the author, stating what was said or that something happened takes the effect and action out of the story. Details are your friend and will help your story. also have your characters actually speak instead of saying that they spoke about something, this will add life to your story.
Hey there Author, keep up the good work. The novel is coming great and I know that you can make it even better. So dont lose hope and do your best!
Has a potential to be one of the top kingdom building novels. Though it only has a few chapters so far you can already imagine the direction it will be going. Steady development of the story in which you can understand the situation well.
So far i cant determine if the MC will have the characteristics (ruthless) that is somewhat expected for one to become a conqueror. As of now im quite satisfied with the MC's decision when attacking other villages but the problem is that those villages are monster villages, i hope he will not become someone like a pacifist (or to kind) when he starts to encounter humans.
seems good can't wait for more chapters!
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literally my only problem with this novel is how horrible the grammar is. And by that I mean that sometimes you can go like two or three paragraphs without seeing anything bad but other times you can read an entire paragraph and have to completely restructure it yourself in order to have it make sense. If you wanted those people that just likes reading on autopilot and doesn't really care what you read and you just want something to read then I'd say that where the grammar is right now to perfect go but if you don't then I would wait till the author fixes the earlier chapters and even later ones from what I've seen him some of the reviews and just clicking through them. The premise is pretty cool in my opinion but it's just hard to get past the first ten chapters if I have to constantly take myself out of the immersion of the story every like three sentences to fix an entire paragraphs worth of words because they're written in the wrong tense, the words are almost completely scrambled and sound like someone's blabbering in a language they don't know or just something similar. I'm sorry if this review seems really harsh but I feel like giving honest opinions is what can help some authors instead of just saying that the grammar is kind of bad because it would be an understatement of my opinion. If you end up fixing the grammar at all I will certainly come back and read this through but until then I don't think it's worth it because it's just too hard on the eyes almost it's hard on The Soul Man
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I don't know who the people rating this with 5 stars are, because this is a terrible story, I imagine if it was translated well, it would still only be a slightly smaller trash fire.Even if the MC was a compelling character, there are no good foils, no-one acts realistically, they are either cartoon bad guys with no foresight who seem to hold a death grudge with the MC, or fawning yes-men who believe MC is omniscient, and omnipotent.considering the title is also the inciting incident, I'm not sure how the author will stretch this book to have any meaningful incidents for much past where it is when he will probably conquer the world and be the lord high supercallifragilisticexpialidocious supreme ultra mega commander of the Mary Sue Earth Kingdom
definitly sounds interstings hope its not just synopsis. and if you have its raw name please give it to us ............................................................
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Quite decent story, worth to try reading.But it's unknown if it will be atencion grabbing in the future. It's kind of slow pace and mc not to dumb but not smart too.