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5/5 (๑ↀᆺↀ๑)✧
What a masterpiece!!! (*Φ皿Φ*)
The author's creativity is very well portrayed in this book! (=ΦÅΦ=)
Well-written, with good descriptions and awesome lead character! ٩(ↀДↀ)۶
I am so glad I came across it! ฅ(*ΦωΦ*) ฅ
Our MC is a poor, but good looking student, and his family is poor, plus his dad is sick. Oh, yes, and the beautiful younger sister, who is a pain in the neck. Luckily, the MC picks up an obsessed gaming system and our story starts from there.
I love this ending especially the romance neding ;)
However, mo fan the idea is really creative but .... professional scrap picking bussiness ?!?!?
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Let me just say, the synopsis was really good
8 hasta ahora la traducción está muy bien, un poco flojo el inicio de la historia también confuso, pero ya ahora que estoy en el capítulo veinte la verdad atrapa veremos que sucede en lo que nos presenta la historia.
The author is new but the way he writes really impresses me. I just got this this book recommended to me by webnovel. The cover looked cool so I thought of giving it a try and man I found a hidden gem. This novel has so so so much potential that it can become one of the best on this site. I bet that if this novel gets 100+ chapters it is going to rank in the top 100 novels on this site. The Main character just rocks man!!! This is the best MC.
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I must confess that I'm not particularly knowledgeable about Eastern Fantasy mechanics, but I suppose I'm slowly getting the gist of them. Regardless, it seems you have quite a good iteration of the genre here from what's available of your story! Here are my notes:~There are some immediate mechanical errors, but they don't really affect comprehension. Mainly, some punctuation (like in dialogue tags and run-on sentences) and verb tenses are off, and the characters' inner thoughts kind of switch the POV as they're not separated by quotation marks or another kind of punctuation. The latter issue is probably the most jarring. Some sentences are cut off in the middle by periods as well.~The descriptions and similes are on-point! They elevate some of the exposition scenes lots! The style is nestled between being simple and more complicated, and I really enjoy that as well.~I started reading this extremely late at night and forgot to comment much, but I also like the bits of humor interjected by the MC. He's a surprisingly wise person with a fixed set of principles that dictate his actions. I never found myself irritated with him, and his train of thought generally made sense.~This might be a genre thing, but it does feel like a lot of information is dropped close together and described in a very mechanical way without a lot of flow/emotion. Conversely, this is all explained quite well and isn't confusing to the reader, so I suppose it just needs balance. There's a lot of world-building done, and the mechanics feel solid as a whole with the whole flower cultivation concept being rather interesting. (In fact, I'm tempted to say this is one of the more intricate worlds I've read about on this site so far.)~As such, the pace lags quite a bit at times, especially when there's the issue in the bar. A bunch of information is dropped here and dissipates the tension from the cliffhanger in the previous chapter. (The mechanic itself that's used--of having the characters explain the world to someone else/a child--is, however, a good one! I love Huang Yin's reactions.) Another time the story is noticeably slow is when Chin Sha is described, and Morgiana's dialogue basically summarizes everything said in the descriptions in a more dynamic way.~However, since it is extremely early in the story, this isn't as big of an issue as if, say, I read through 100 chapters and had the same impression. You're taking time to build the characters and settings, so it does work!~On that topic, Morgiana is super cool! She falls and keeps on standing up for herself! (She upset me for a moment when she challenged Chin Sha, but I quickly understood where she was coming from.)~All the characters have complex motivations, and I like reading about them in detail. A lot of them seem two-faced in a sense, so I think that's interesting for the conflict.~Be wary of pronouns. When in doubt, it's best just to use someone's name to not cause confusion as sometimes, during the transitions between chapters, you don't specify that it's Xu An's thoughts. This would be fine in 3rd POV limited, but this is omniscient.~I love the showdown in the pub! I can feel the urgency and emotions of the characters during this moment, especially when Xu An prevents Morgiana from being punched.~I also think the somewhat spotty memories are interesting, and they really play into how Xu An acts. The parallels between his lives are cool!Overall, this story has a lot more insightful bits than I would have expected, and I think you've got a lot of creativity and good word choices in your writing style. It has an interesting premise and characters as well! Good luck with writing this novel!! ? (4.6/5.0)
While the story setting seems unique and interesting, with hidden organisations and what not, that's about the only thing of interest. The characters are all, without exception, broken and so superficial that it gets annoying when they just interact. I still don't understand how the harem tag comes into play here, since the mc is probably one of the most unlikeable characters if seen so far. He couldn't even care for his mom, who somehow managed to pay the bills for them to not end up on the street. the annoying part about that is that this not caring about anyone and not having emotions for anyone is emphasised repeatedly for no reason at all. Interesting world building with (imo) terrible character design. Good luck
Does anyone know the Chinese title for this series? Please help me out. Thanks a lot.