As the author of the novel, I will give my story the highest score shamelessly. This story is about the master who is calm, handsome, (innocent), benevolent yet cold, and revengeful at the same time. His disciples are also one of a kind. Spoiler: The story will be slow-paced in the beginning with multiple POVs from the chapter Huan to the end of "Fighting League". And from that point, it will be a little faster. Read the story while you become a disciple of Rong Yuan along the way...
cautiously looking forward to this one.dmosmamdidndjcicidkpwpw,cmcnidieoskdmfjfieoskcnjrieowlkdjiqowieifiei28cjdjekiwjcjdkwkksnckeo2kemmdp
This review is only grading for Writing Quality, Story Development, and Character Design, for reasons I will elucidate on later.WRITING QUALITYThe author has taken a serious gamble in writing in third-person present tense and I feel it hasn't paid off. This is a personal thing, but I mention it first because it can seriously impact how easily read the work is; third-person past tense is the standard for fiction for reasons. This isn't the reason for my score here, though.I was surprised and shocked in the course of going over this work to discover that it apparently has an editor. If I may make a suggestion, perhaps you should have spent less time arguing over using a pronoun and more time actually proofreading the thing, Mighty Editor.The author's grasp of appropriate punctuation and capitalization is very loose. The confusing convention of bracketing thoughts with periods (yes, I understand Inkstone doesn't allow formatting; there are still other ways to do it) only worsens the presentation when half of the things that should have periods at the end don't.Apostrophes keep getting thrown in where they don't belong. The author has his own creative ways of spelling certain words (phlegm is now flem apparently, for example). All-in-all it's a crapshow that desecrates the mother tongue.I rate this even lower than usual because this is apparently with an editor's assistance. Bad.STORY DEVELOPMENT / CHARACTER DESIGNI am exempting World Background from this review as it is a work using the real world (the stars given are the average of the work).The synopsis is useless. One might think the author of the work is solely relying on the popularity of novels with systems that get updated often enough to carry the work, but that would be cynical of me to suggest so I won't.The author seems to mistake "slang use" for "character". Applied to side characters to denote class/status or used with auxiliaries or a main with more personality than a potato, it's a useful tool. This is not the situation here; the slang is the character here.The main character is a stupid, ugly, dirty, whiny slob. That's his trait list, more or less. There isn't a whit of charm or even something intriguing to care about. The others characters are this but in stiffer cardboard.SUMMARY AND AN EXTRA WORD OR TWOThe work is a painful slog through a minefield of bad formatting and creative attempts at reforging the English language anew. The characters could all die in nuclear fire and the world would be better for it. This isn't the same as writing a "love to hate" villain, for the record; they're just that abominable.Why did I not include Stability of Updates? Because I've decided to not rate that anymore when the prose is abominable like it is here. I no longer wish to encourage authors to churn out factory crap at the expense of using a straightforward spelling and grammar checker (again, amazed that this work supposedly has an editor).The other thing I have to note: I'm not sure if this work is a genuine effort anyway. Lazy synopsis, lazy cover, short chapters with zero TLC, and the author seems to launch himself from inflammatory position to inflammatory position in a ball of flame to put the Hindenburg to shame.I'll make no judgment of the various attempts at self-immolation. Instead I'll just note my personal opinion that it's monumentally stupid to insult a major demographic base for the site, which largely draws from an audience in SE Asia.Whether troll work or genuine, I would not recommend this to anybody for anything except a master class on what not to do. If this is indeed a parody of the "low effort system novel" trend, I do not want to encourage any more of it. If it is genuinely written, I still do not want to encourage any more of it. I just want the pain to stop.
Somewhat similar to the happy xianxia novels...ie: MC has a happy supporting normal family with weak cultivation but finds his hax which is a ship in this case,....its quite its interesting....long chps...well written with proper plot and development..NOW..normally this would be a suggestion but here I am asking/demanding...dont make this ****ty like other xianxia novels where MC goes after HEAVEN DEFYING BEAUTIES..and in most cases rapes them or gains their " ACCEPTANCE"...cause he is strong...then they separate for some BS and MC collects a massive harem...complete ****ty and shallow relationships...****ty MC and lovers,.....try too build the romance,.......keep it happy and fluff..no sad separation or any angsty betrayal ****...keep harem small........make MC smart and OP and not a naive forgiving idiot,.....kill all enemies no mercy .......Anyway goodluck.....
There is only 8 chapters so far. But you get quite some action from Asura, the ruthless unbound protagonist. There is a lot of face-slapping and looming schemes. There are mages AND martial artists in this world? Is this an Eastern-Western fusion? I am definitely excited for the world to gradually unveil. The formatting is not perfect. But hey, it doesn't affect the read that much. Solid story. Keep up the good work!
The MC has no personality at all, the plot is boring, and the setting is unoriginal. All in all, give it a read if his cheat interests you (it's not great either), but come prepared to regret it.
Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY??? Why Druid, WHY???
Seems like a magic version of "The Legendary Mechanic" except theres no background to the MC, just wakes up in the game. MC barely gets his first quest 10 chapters in and completes it mostly solo, agaisnt an npc twice his level who takes more than 24 hours to heal and regain mana. Also takes the MC several weeks to get to level 10. Just under 3 months. the majority of game the 1st 10-20 levels can be gotten anywhere from 5 to 6 hrs to 1 week. just not getting drawn into the story.
What are these 5*? This novel is so trash it's sad. My head hurts after 4chapters im more confused than ever. There is no logic of a story at all you can feel author has no plan for this story, he just go with the flow. And the MC IQ is around 15 years old kid, so we can guess who the author is...
Great potential until the MC decided to lick humanity's ass and be their pawn.Bullied boy, hates society, etc etc. As a wolf all of that is irrelevant because you know..forced plot must happen. Just..Author, please try to know that if you pick a monster MC, at least try to stick with the monster part. Or just name it "The Divine Wolf..." and stop there. Just remove the or cause that's all he is. A pet. A waste of a novel idea.
I like this novel mc rincarnated to wolf anti-mainstream. need more chap hehe
I really like this game. I hope it gets more updates and that it gets through the voting system already. I want a mass release!!!! Though the premise reminds of the Prodigal novel, it's very different. This novel has more depth and personally, I think a lot more thought and research has gone into writing this. A system novel executed well!