The story has a large, colourful cast of characters, with universal themes at play, all set in an interesting world. There's little fluff which lets you jump straight into the story. It's also well written.If I'm being critical, there are dry exposition dumps that could be integrated more organically into the story through dialogue and descriptions. There was no need to give a date and tell us about the state of the moon as if it were a fact. A character could check a calendar or the time. A bunch of characters could simply be staring outside and have said outside described. My point is that there are better ways to communicate ideas that aren't straight up exposition dumps.
Not a bad read it was plot was well set up. that is all I could say , I manage to finish the trial read that means it is still pass to me. ,,.,....
Writing Quality - 3/5 - It is a good read but it's painful to read each paragraph. For example, you always wrote in...Smiling wryly, (Name) bla bla blaNext paragraph: Looking at the interface, (Name,) bla bla blaNext paragraph: Sucking a cold bla bla, (Name) bla blaCritics: Next time, change the way you wrote for a better read, cause every paragraph is painful to read because as soon you made a paragraphs every time you made a comma ', ' the next word you wrote is always the mc name or side character name; After the comma making it cringe to read.Stability of update: 5/5 - Not much to say since the author put effort to update every day.Story Development: 4.5/5 - Minus 0.5 for the mc.Character Design: 4/5 - Minus 1 for the misinformation in the early chaps for the character design. I don't want to be racist so let's just wrap it up in mystery. World Background: 5/5- Very Good!*****Overall: It's a good read, definitely recommended for those wanted a humorous r18 novel. Some paragraph mistakes, typos, and misinformation. But it is still an enjoyable read. Definitely 5/5 for the author for creating such a brilliant work.
It is a very good imagination and good character building. You need to work on the sentence formation for the next chapters. You have really improved in the third chapter. Good work keep it going.......
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R M.S Titanic is always euals to pain and heartbreak author had done a great job . The story of Wallace is truly a legend. Thank you author for sharing this story.