The premise is ok but the quality of the writing is pretty bad :-/ There are a lot of small typos all over the place and the sentence structure can get very confusing as well.
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This is brandon gould this is my review of your book I have enjoyed the chapters that i have read so far, The concept of the world with superpowers and those with out, reminds me of My hero acadeiema. the world is descirded well, as far as i can tell it is well written, the story is goinfg at a good steady pace and i will be sure to contue to read this story to see where it goes
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As a horror writer myself, the author did a bit of creepiness and chill on the two chapters that the author wrote. Creepiness and thrill. Words aren't hard to comprehend. If you are into horror give this a try!
Imagine living life on easy mode. Scratch that, imagine living life on 'easier than easy' mode. This novel's protagonist is living it. MC's initialisation gift [from the system] is enough for him to advance to the next cultivation stage. The bonus reward for attaining the next stage is...enough points to advance to the stage after. Oh, and upon advancing each stage the MC will also conveniently be gifted everything he needs. From the very best cultivation manual, alchemy production, weapon crafting, and of course can't forget apex combat skills. If all of this wasn't enough the protagonist is a complete rock. He feels nothing. He believes in nothing. He wants for nothing. He just cultivates.
Your English is good but the crafting is not on the level, I reckon you study a few like viewpoint, Show not tell, and do mind to keep an eye for the little things that may not seem important as it sometimes sets off the readers.Your main problem I notice reading the first three chapter is that the viewpoint is wrong. it's much like an omniscient telling a story he knows everything about. You should change that to 1st or 3rd person omniscient.and Show don't tell, all the aspiring author get through this, I myself was an example. I fixed this problem through revising as I'm not still good enough to follow.that's all my personal thoughts reading the first 3 chapters. Good Day.
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at first, I liked the MC because he wants to Cultivate in peace but in the development of the story the MC looks like Coward and he wasted a lot of Opportunities to be stronger than he was but as I said he is a Coward