A sci-Fi dystopian future in which earthlings are just one of multiple alien races. The humans take the outcasts and unconforming, then torturously genetically alter them to create super soldiers. Earth then "donates" these poor soulless to the cause of fighting off a nearly unstoppable hive menace, that currently is tearing through the intelligent races. These unwilling brain chip controlled humans still have intelligence and can slip around the constraints they are chained with. An excellent short story that would make a great novel.
Hidden Gem. It is a great sports story that I am bv happy to have found. I hope the author keeps up the good work.
heads Up: The grammar and length area work through but the author has shown improvement. Really excited for more.
The author is the incarnation of lazy
Update more or ur ghey
The story start with dark plot and i really enjoyed how the author create the post apocalypse and how the author make the plot of this story not boring. every chapter i read i really can't hold myself
An entertaining novel to read while killing time, I love the lemon scene and it makes my lower body tense
The story is good. No issues with writing quality either. My only complaint is that the protagonist has a crappy personality. Goes out of his way to avoid helping anyone. Doesn't matter if they're good or bad or if they've helped him in the past. "Not my problem" and "too much trouble" seem to be his primary thoughts. Even when he does help someone, he demands payment for the most inconsequential things. I prefer a good protagonist who actually wants to help people and be a good person
The story is getting worse as the time goes by. Here are the idiotic things i have read so far.On the spot finger printing and checking without magnifying glass.. now thats got to be one of the most inefficient way to validate a person identity trying to enter and secured area.The Author just spent 13 chapters explaining how his brothel works. Author would sometimes spend 3 - 4 chapters on sexy time but spends 1 chapter on a battles that supposed to have happened in days.
I don't like this book there are so many things missing here how does he get stronger by reincarnating why does he act the way he does to everyone why is he so impulsive why doesn't he consider consequences why are so many characters acting like they did nothing wrong why so many secretswhats with none of them being able to admit when they are wrong i like the idea the story has promise but there are so many things that make no sense and are not explainedakuna or whatever her name was is her only purpose to open the gate and keep people their? waste of a character mc could have been kinder to her get her to love him and trust him and then corrupt her to be a loyal servant and then he could have used her knowledge to carry out his plans and used her for his sexual desires as he is a demon at heart and they are very lustfulsame with sister, sister is supposed to have knowledge about the working of their village and if not then acquainted with people who know the working of the village and use them to conquer and use the village for whatever purpose for a demon as powerful as he was you would think he would understand the value of manipulation and using people to his advantage but he has this false feeling of superiority when he himself is a human nowthe things i listed above is a general idea of what can be changed to make this story better he needs to understand the value of manipulation whether it be to gain loyal people that can provide information and fulfill his sexual desires as he is a demon at heart (could include the body's sister there too if you want) and other things or just manipulation of emotions so he can gain support of masses, control of his emotions/desires and understanding that actions have consequences how can he destroy that many souls with no consequences from the celestials and divines and suchI believe thay once you work on these you will be on part to having a better story THESE ARE MY OPINIONS EVERYONE HAS THEIR OWN FEEL FREE TO DISAGREE (i read all chapters as of 8/4/23 (d/m/y))(i apologize for this being so long and for any grammatical mistakes i made but i genuinely want to see this story be successful so i just gave some criticism about things I believe would help the story.)
Author, I loved your story, it's obvious that there is potential, lots of potential, seeping from your novel. The only thing lacking is um, how do I say this? Ah yes, a narrative technique. It's evident from the synopsis that you lack a narrative technique. Please don't treat this as criticism, merely feedback to make your story even better! I love the concept, the worldbuilding, but the story could use some descriptions. For a beginning author, your writing is quite good, and I believe you should keep writing because practice makes perfect :) Good luck and kudos to you!
I absolutely loved this novel so far. It has lot of potential. I will support the writer and I hope he will continue writing this novel. Also, I will recommend everyone to read this novel.
It’s a good book, but the grammar puts me off a bit. The MC is a Gary sue (super handsome, genius, fighting expert) and is contradictory so that’s kinda bad. I still like it, and would continue to read it if it got proofread.