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First of all Full support from us and second Don't end this journey of yours Mr Author It's really good to see dedicated people like you and also RI fan
I really like the whole plot so far and cant stop waiting for more! Please make more as I love the story and characters.
Overall, it's pretty good. Overall, it's pretty good. Overall, it's pretty good. Overall, it's pretty good. Overall, it's pretty good. Overall, it's pretty good. Overall, it's pretty good.
The synopsis has its impact alone! If you have to read something of science fiction and a fantasy combined genre and magical realism added ingredient in it, this book will suit you! Great job author!
Really superb. I love the actions, they are breathtaking and it's well detailed, I understand what am reading and it's also well organized. Keep up the great work koladeizdavid!
Arrogant and reckless to the point of being brainless...provoking people 2 large realms above him (he's core, nascent above, leaving aperture above that and he's provoking 100+ genius (can also fight above their realm) leaving aperture disciples to fight him to the death at the same time). He also just keeps showing off his unreasonably fast cultivation which should have gotten him kidnapped and locked up by some really strong demon cultivator to extract his secrets, but magically nothing happened to him for no reason. He also doesn't use his cheat that well. He leaves 1 out of 3 slots inactive and I think he could even open 4 or 5 instead of 3 with his current spirit stones, but he doesn't. So he's just wasting slots that could be used to make pills (for money or ones to help speed his cultivation) or cultivate like infinite body refinement techniques. Dropped on ch120 sadly, I like the cheat but the rest of the novel is bad.
petition to bring back the world of deities.........................................................................................................................
Nice atory!!Author, I only have one problem,I think you should the MC's background to us betterAnd also, I also think you should now post more often.??
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So I went way past the chapters that you've wanted to set as premium, and now I feel like I should give my thoughts on what I've read so far.Storywise, it's fine as a generic video game novel. However there's still stuff that lacks premise and explanation. Firstly, what makes this game so special from the other games, aside from a large playerbase during release, and how does it connect to the MC's real life? I feel like there could be a massive plothole here unless you've planned the future really well, or there might be issues in the future. If the company, per se, designed these devices that are used for the game and it turns out they have something with them that touches on forbidden stuff like time travel or whatnot, you'll have to execute it really well.Now to some minor issues. Firstly, aside from during the phantom tourney where it was apparent our MC was streaming the battles, I had issues knowing when he was streaming and when he stopped streaming. Not only that, there seems to be very lacking in terms of interactions, since all the streamers I've seen frequently interact with the chat minus situations where they're forced to do something that completely preoccupies them. Although the situations you have the MC in prevents him from casually interacting, the only real interactions I've seen was only like 1 chapter in the book, and I suggest having more interactions to make the character seem more like a real streamer (e.g thanking the viewers more for their donations). I also recommend making it more obvious as to when he started streaming and when he stopped.Onto the next issue I feel. The battles, although the descriptions are there, felt lacklaster in the sense of 1, there's not really much interactions. User A uses x skill on the monster, the monster dodges, than activates x skill of its own. This also happens during tourney, as character a casts a skill that summons tentacles, but then we just jump to character b's POV of suddenly becoming entangled. I'm not sure if you can understand my suggestion here, but for example:Character A uses [warcry]. Letting out a loud howl, the members in the parties felt themselves strengthen as they watched their attack stat sharply rise. Something like this paints for more imagery, and although there are areas where you did do this, some areas felt lacking or executed not well enough. This is something you can polish.Final thing I feel that your story really needs is risk. For one, this character is playing this game for some odd reason instead of working on a way to save his family's business, yet we don't know how the game is related to his past at all. If you die in the game, you die irl is one of the most popular risks. In the case of the King's Avatar, we have the MC working towards building a new team and going back to pro league, hence there is a clear goal. With your story, aside from making a guild and whatnot, it seems like his goals are unclear of what he wants to do different in this life. If I had a chance to go back in time, I wouldn't spend it playing a video game that would eventually die unless there's a very good reason to. Be careful of these plotholes.
Aye, not many chapters to give a detailed review but I like how much I have read till now.Really loved his interaction with his daughter in that world before he passed away.I am quite interested to read how this goes since he was a king before. Acting really shouldn't be a problem for him. Not to mention get into the industry which involves deceit and schemes.Hope you don't drop it~