An amazing story, updates are stable, and the plot is really original. This story is one that's worth reading, I'm excited to see how this story will develop.
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A non-contracted new author who joined WebNovel on 22nd December 2020 and has been writing Novels for contests non-stop because of the love and encouragement received from you guys!
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Amazing start to the start that got me hooked. Can't wait for more!
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Writing Quality
The first ten chapters were great. If it would have kept the same non-serious Slice of Life story going out would have been a great story. The syntax and spelling is some of the best in this platform. So much so that at first I was confused by the mixed reviews and wondering why it wasn't on a more mainstream platform like Royal Roads rising stars or trending.
As it turns out the reason is that start is just a catfish for a dark fantasy romance story that lurks right around the corner. A style that's much more dower and depressing. A real chore to read. It never recovers its tone and style at the start. Slowly it eats away at what you liked about it in the start until you look up, metaphorically speaking, and wonder how you got here from there.
Truly a shame. But the depictions of torture and mind control of the love interest. For over thirty chapters as it amateurishly throws female leads at you left and right in total chaos best represents this series and why it isn't going to be going mainstream anytime soon. What on Earth were you thinking? You had such a good plot going. This is what creative writing does when you don't sit in the driver's seat doing outlines for the chapters and the arcs themselves. Storyboarding a chapter before and after you write it to make sure that it's not just enjoyable to read, but you got the tone across you wanted. And doing drafts so the overall product doesn't suck. A comedy of poor writer decisions. Sigh...
Story Development
I don't think I need to say more there, do I?
Character Design
They were well put together at first.
Update Stability
There's over 400 chapters somehow. Probably because you skipped doing quality assurance writing?
World Background
That lack of planning really shows here. The world-building can be said to be banal and likely written chapter to chapter. When normally you're supposed to write this first. I'll still rate it middling, because most amateur writers have no idea what a Literature Bible is anyway. Even if you pointed them at the Fallout Bible for instance? Some of them might even argue it overkill.
very badly written too cliche there was no need for the girl, in the beginning, to be present or even be with the mc not being misogynistic but it's just too cliche I am starting to hate romance/harem in novels its just bad to me The system is way too controlling the MC doesn't fit the character of someone who should be the sect leader Everything is done too hastily
It reads really well, definitely one of the best pieces I've seen writtenBoth the real world and the game world make you feel completely immersed and it's done extremely well.i didn't feel stressed to learn or remember anything, it simply flowed,If the author keeps this up we are going to have a book worth reading in the future
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I read to chapter 20 and couldn't continue. I am sorry but the story is boring. The writing quality is good however the story isn't engaging
Even tho the MC might appear overpowered at first that is not at all the case in the grand sheme of things.