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I started laughing from the beginning and didn't really stop. I hope the author keeps updating it.
The story has a promising premise. Down the road, I noticed there were too many abrupt time-skips in a single chapter. While this is inevitable, please consider a time-skip once every other chapter or so if necessary and use the chance to elaborate more about characters.
Settling that aside, as other had pointed out, there are grammatical errors, incorrect uses of punctuation marks and chopped sentences. I'd suggest getting an editor to help you with this issue and you could focus more on fleshing out your main plot.
This is my first review.
OK where do I start from...... hmmmm.
Alright, first the editing quality of this novel is crap. Like seriously crappy. It kills the flow of the book I can barely read one paragraph without having to either take a break or roll my eyes. It's that bad. I mean if it's a middle schooled who is writing this then it's understandable. I'm already complaining so much but I'm just on the third chapter at this point.
I like the the fact that a whole new type of system is introduced here. I mean a system that gives you quests based on your original occupation is not something I've seen before. Most systems just force you to do stuff. Well if you've seen similar systems to this just outside name of the novel under replies. That aside, I find the system really childish and cringy.
There is barely any world background and the plot just seems forced. Well this is just my opinion after reading three chapters. Hopefully it gets better.
The update frequent is probably one of the few good points about this novel though.
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Good different cultivator story, however the author needs to find a editor as there is alot of grammar and spelling errors. It is a good story... please find an editor.
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This is a fan fic and yet it is locked at 20 or 21 chapters? What?
~Positives~
Really liking this novel, while it has some similarities in genre to some other novels I have read, it is also unique in so many ways; such as the very good world building, or the MC’s interesting ability that I haven’t even thought of before.
~Negatives~
Not much of a problem, but I am feeling like the MC’s personality is a bit bland; however, there is plenty of time to sort that out in the later chapters as there is only 10 chaps so far, so you can’t expect too much.
~Summary~
This has the potential to become one of my favourite novels when more chapters come out and depending on how the story progresses. Will be looking forward to more chapters! :)
An amazing story and has a good potential. I really liked how you described the plot and the scenes so well. Can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work.
New Concept of Cultivation and System is always appreciated.
WRITING QUALITY--- One of the in my collection!?
STORY DEVELOPMENT--- Very Good pace and there are many Plot twists as we move further. ?
CHARACTER DESIGN--- This is one of Best Asset of this Story.?
UPDATING STABILITY--- It is Regular and Timely. ☺️
WORLD BACKGROUND--- Very Nicely arranged and described.(also my favourite) It is not like those Complicated Ones and It is quite easy to understand this one.?
ADVISE--- [READ IT NOW BECAUSE IT IS WORTH IT] ?
Almost every arc's so good that is gives me goosebumps and great level of amusement just by reading few chapters totally recommended ??