It's a great novel, the character development is especially good
I quite like where this story is going. I think it can do better in various aspects, like descriptions or details, but I can't say much since I myself wouldn't know how to do better. As for free ideas, only comes to me adding some friendly animal characters; I believe you already set the base for it.
I'll follow your work closely, as long as I can. good job!
Mc has some serious similarities with kang han soo from fff-trashero and will develop do become a sort of anti-hero/ villain Mc that’ll annoy and torture his enemies (in funny ways) for his own gain (I read the Chinese novel of this with google translate, the Chinese name is provided by someone in the reviews)
Great novel. Loving it so far. A great mix of Cyberpunk and fantasy.
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discord's is expired.anyways, i highly recommend this novel!
I dont care who's site this is on as long as the translators get proper credit. The translators go through the trouble of giving us this to read. MC is kinda slow to worldly affairs, wish he was more like Wang Lin from RI.
The idea is promising but a few touches need to be made.
1. More paragraphs: Few paragraphs make the work a little overbearing to read so please give paragraphs at most after three to four sentences.
2. Spacing: At the end of certain sentences, there are no spaces giving no difference between the end of a sentence and the beginning of another.
Overall, the plot is nice but it needs some editing.
Keep up the good work by the way. Writing isn't easy
Hi author here with a shameless review.
I want to say several things, so let's go slowly.
About the writing quality, I'm going to be honest here, it's not the best and isn't near since I'm not that good at English, but I'm trying, so bear with it until either I get better or I can pay a grammar checker.
The story development, I'm trying to make it slow, not too much, but slow, so I don't know how that will end.
The character design, it gets better (I think) around the chapter 11, so if you can pass the first ones, it will improve (a little, don't know in the future how it will be).
The updating stability, I'm gonna be straight honest, it's awful. Since I'm a student with a quite strict school, I have lots of exams, so I have to study, and also this is a hobby, so I have other priorities. If you can understand that, I thank you, if you can't, I can't do nothing about it.
And finally, the world background, there isn't too much right now, and probably it won't be too complex in the future, since I'm very clueless.
If after all that negative things I said about my book (I now realize this doesn't help at all) you still want to read it and actually read it, I welcome you to this adventure that I don't know where will take us.
(Pss, also join the discord, so we can chat and hear me ramble.)
Reciprocating the review you gave me! THANKS MAN Appreciate the support! blahblahblahblahblahblahblahblah ugh this is annoying, too many characters needed
I really like the way Hinami changed Tomozaki perspective of life and it has really been helpful to him he sees life like a game and he is the one behind the console
And I’d really like for the story to continue when kikuchi runs out on him in the library
Some of the filler chapters were exciting some not so much so please I would really like it the main light novel is getting a move on
I love this story and hope that it will come back.