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Quite a good Novel you have written there, I might say it is very good for a starter.
Keep up the good work.
interesting, it is worth reading this work
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This has a predecessor novel in mtl... The title is reiki recovery, just search it.. It also a billion times talent starting from 10 or 100 times, I forgot.. The mc is an old man, also an old soldier of cataclysm war.. If you had read that, this one will feel bland.. I know, because I had read it..
Not a bad start. You have grammar mistakes here and there and some of your sentences are a bit too long. I do like the way you describe things so far, paints a clear enough picture. I would appreciate more descriptions of the surrounding.
Overall, a good start.
I really love this story so much that I thought I was Joel who happens to face the worse everywhere he goes.
Can't wait for the next chapters to be updated
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Summoning? More like off-brand beast taming. And the translation is terrible. What kind of definition is "the type that kept running".
the novel is pretty interesting, looking forward to read the next chapters
1st to review, yay I feel accomplished now
Writing quality is dull and boring. There's unneeded censoring, improper use of pronouns, and unappealing descriptions for skills and ****.
Story development is terrible, it's going at a steady pace but the obvious plot armor is too blinding to look at. There is absolutely no balancing and stats along with skills are just randomly slapped down while the author thinks, "No one is going to bother to calculate anything, so it's fine. I'm a genius for making mobs so overpowered that a lot of people are in an endless loop of crippling their accounts."
Character design.. Oh man, oh ****... Main character is trash for someone who has 7 years of experience while also running a guild/team/whatever you want to call it. I thought, "C-tier? Must of been really behind." But it's quite obvious that the main character is a fucking retard who made his way from sheer luck. Regarding NPCs and other players, their personality and appeal is just as worse as the main character; they're just really stale fluff to add onto the MC's sub-par design.
World background. Almost non-existent. Locations names are just dropped down in text, there is no descriptions to build up on the scenery. "It's a cave. It's a forest. It's a road. It's a village." I wouldn't care if the main character was absolute trash if there was an actual world out there and not some **** that was thrown down on the spot without any details.
Final verdict - Not even worth to read as a throwaway. And why the **** are you putting so much time into explaining the benefits of the beta when he's going to lose everything when the game officially launches? Please improve the world development, a story isn't a story without an actual world to it.
