Bad just horrifically bad. I almost never leave reviews but this story is bad to the point that I feel the need to leave one.
The system is overly complicated to the point of not needing a cheat sheet. The mechanics behind everything is even worse.
The MC is so dumb I feel like I am less intelligent for having any insight into his thoughts.
The cliches are ridiculous without being funny.
This is a few hours of my life I will never get back and I am mad about it
The story is great fun and an excellent read — for the free chapters. After that, it’s machine translation with no sign of human editing (mangled names and pronouns every paragraph). This deserves SO much better. [img=angry]
I really hope this isn't another generic novel..... Sigh can't we get some more unique stuff? It could be a good one if the main character's life story is a tragedy and he actually develops into a good character but whatever...
The mc is really stupid for a regressor and so are most of the characters. The world has potential but it's held back a ton. Even on chapter 200 the mc cares more about boring basic skills than any of the cool elemental attacks that are hinted at. the single most terrible part is the author is stretching out chapters to get paid more. I just read a 3 chapter arc about selecting a mission and most of what was said was repetition. if you want to read this skip every 3 characters
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Good author... if your novel only had as a reason as a hobby of yours, then without a doubt I would be encouraging you with this peculiar system that you present, after all you don't see many novels with that kind of premise.
However, author..., when I saw you compete in the WSA 2022, then it is really questionable what theme you chose for your system, and not because it is a sin to write Simp stuff. If not to the type of audience that is going to be addressed, without further exaggeration, and many readers will not give your novel a chance, just because it has the title Simp.
Then, in chapters 1 and 8, it is more than enough for several readers to abandon the novel, and even I felt uncomfortable in chapter 8. The reason was the interaction of Jack and Mary, their thoughts and actions do not match, not they are grounded and feel compelled for a later plot to follow. Then if I have to guess later Mary will regret it and then Jack will slap him with a reality that no longer needs her ("Sigh, that theme is already more than reused by several authors"), and with that I'm not saying that I forgive her; however, the previously established relationship is a headache for many readers.
Now the question of characters we have a protagonist without self-esteem, with an inflated ego, Mary the typical naive heroine who later becomes the intriguing villain, Lucy the opportunistic girl, and in itself a large majority of readers will repudiate that type of background for your characters.
Well author with that being said, unfortunately your premise is already doomed, as long as you can win, I just know that it will take extraordinary effort to make the Simp system enjoyable to read.
Honestly, I wanted to rate this story 3 stars, but then I remembered that it's too early to give a review; however, I felt the need to write this, so in the form of support I decided to leave it 3.6, now I recommend reading it, well if you are a tolerant and calm person you may give it a try, but if you lack those two, then no, because you will take a bitter experience in these early chapters.
As soon as all this is said, it's my personal opinion and if I'm wrong, just let me know in the answers section, I don't mean to offend anyone and all that, and good luck author with the competition.
One of the few novels that keep you hooked up, it's interesting and there's suspence and u will want to know more about it
I am enjoying this novel very much (up to ch. 35): the likable MC is smart, brave and diligent, and the setting is detailed and logical.
Holy **** dude can you fking explain anything????? Like wtf is happening in this goddamn world? Too confusing but it had potential... truly a pity since the author is obviously inexperienced and getting criticized, but he handled it pretty well by rewriting the chapters, but it still doesn’t make any sense
Ah yes. The obligatory author's shameless self-review with a perfect 5.0 score. How original!
Seriously, though. This novel's pretty awesome. It's got mutants, cyborgs, cyborgs fighting cyborgs, mutants fighting mutants, cyborgs fighting mutants, cyborgs fighting mutants fighting bad cyborgs fighting bad mutants, in bullet time, with plenty of mayhem and flying limbs and explosions.
So yeah, it's my best work to date. Objectively speaking. True story, that.
(It's my first novel, so of course, it's da best)
Anyways, anyone who reads to this line please spare 30 seconds and leave me some feedback (positive or negative, but preferably positive). Thank you!
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its a harem so we cultured men would love to read this. sorry for my bad English, it's my 4th language