First thing, I love to applaud you with the concept. For me, it's new, unusual and I never heard of it before. The thing about sci-fictions today are the ideas seemed identical so reading your novel was refreshing to me. Another is I love how you already put distinctive traits for each character you presented which makes us readers easier to differentiate with them and note them individually. And what I like the most is how you lay the events perfectly that lead to string age. It helped put depth, add mystery and stir my curiosity. What I'd kindly suggest is apply flashback rather than descriptive explanation of the past(though, it's up to you especially if that's just your style) because I personally think it has more feels. Nonetheless, I had no problem with grammar or mechanics because I honestly didn't see errors on those. Ultimately, kudos! I really admire sci-fi writers because I believe they had the hardest time. Anyway, keep the fire in you burning!
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I like how Clay evolve from being an anti social kind of person to a very sweet and caring person. The plot twist has left me a real good shock.
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I am enjoying it so far I will add on to this later-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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I wanted to like it. and it's not like it's bad or anything, it's just far from what it could be. The mc got a pretty op pathon day one but never uses it. I think it was used only once or twice by chap 70 even though there's so much that it could be used for. instead, the mc is so reliant on the system for anything and everything, even stuff that his own power could be used for. This is supposed to be some top notch gamer but in his new world, all he does is basically use the wiki and a walkthrough. The mc needs to think for himself rather than have an all-knowing system spell every little thing out for him.
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back to his starting path, it's so op if he even thinks about it for a second. He can find literally anything he wants but instead uses the system for everything he could be doing himself. locate enemies nearby? his path could do it but uses the system instead. find an enemies weak point? that's something that his power could do. find a good place to cultivate? find some good treasure? find the beast core? find the best spot to hit the hammer while smithing? literally anything to do with locating something, he should be able to do with his path, yet he has the system to do all of that and more anyways. what's the point of giving him op powers if he literally never uses it?
and look, maybe he finally decides to later on. who knows? he hasn't used it by chap 70 so anything else is just too late. too bad because it could have been much better
These pilots are a evil thing, they out these interesting novels here without any chapter and don't even have the heart to leave the raw so we could go there read.
It's a little bit interesting but it's nothing special. The concept (which is not even original) has a lot of potential but the almost all characters and development are too unlikeable. Overall, there's nothing good here. Better read something better or do your important responsibilies in your life.
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I like the reincarnated characters and that they have very rotisserie powers, and the way in which the story is developing I would say that it is on the right track.