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Interesting
A great premise building immediate tension in the early chapters with the 3 months. This story explores the mind space of someone with limited time. The use of punctuation and flow of sentences could be improved with time and more practice, but the characters that are integral to stories like this are all built up nicely in the early stages.
There may be a sense of over-description at times, though it only provides more details into both the environment and the mental of the main character.
Speaking of the main character, the vibrant yet lightly erratic thoughts and conversation with self is something I actually related to way too hard with.....
Hey everyone, it’s me the author.
I’m popping here to apologise if my upload schedule is trash. Also all comments are appreciated. I will do my best to improve my style with feedback.
Thank you for reading my story XD
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Story progress fast. MC is an immortal but acts like a teenager in first chapter.
Some of you might drop it half way but don't!
Casue there are kinky chapters waiting for you!
this is my first yime writing a review but the synopsis really interest me so i give 5 star , it gave me the feeling of mysterious realm......
This novel is top notch quality, gives off the pro author vibe. From the extraordinary character development to the wondrous world building, this novel is just excellent.
I would totally recommend this :D
understandably, this fiction has a fairly interesting start with a non human protagonist.
the down side is that the author, yes im sure they don't speak English as a primary language and have adjusted to that, but there is no noticeable improvement or effort to improve the multitude of glaring vocabulary mistakes
the characters have no real "meat" to them, no substance or relatability. they are very one deminsional with little growth - to me at least.
the story is a cookie cutter bit with a slight twist with the system. You can ignore similarities or the boring monotony thanks to that twist.
Author does update steadily.
the world itself doesn't appear horribly built - have not Ben able to read much past 50. it started hurting my brain.
as a whole, the fiction is one you'd likely read once and waste time with. at least the free chapters. having read at least half of the available chapters - at this time - I can say it isn't worth reading past the premium status. no actual improvement is done in the authors writing and it isn't worth spending cash on.
Well, first off I wanted to elaborate It's pretty fine read, that feels like a proper light novel with just some minor problems. Like logic behind characters actions really screwed, and because of this author have some need to explain how they come to this. A lot of lucky moments, that you could see from just a glance that it's forced. Now more of personal preference.
I don't understand how you created it. It's basically shounen cliches stories with sprinkle of smut and a lot of cringe. Mc? Beta guy with wild demon inside of him. How wild demon in him? As far as Japanese cliche allowed him. Just a guy that doesn't afraid of fighting and peaking out girls. With morales and need of showing off and being a hero? Oooph...
How good characters? They do dumb stuff regularly, for the sake of a story. I don't know, not sure. How good lewds? Well, if you close you eyes on a lot of cringe lines of mc, and skip his thoughts. It's very mild, I never understood why Damien wild, when he is quite prude and gentlemanly.
In the end, it's a huge disappointment in smut area, and as a proper story. If you read some harem light novels, you already see those characters, situations, and already could predict where and how, main character get his mental growth. The worst problem, you still need to read about mc, when there is better character which is Damien.
P. S. Did we return in 2013? Where those things where popular, it's even called new and fresh... Bruh.
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A straight up good read, at least for the nineteen chapters trail read gives. A slow burn for sure without the instant power up a system novel gives, but this gives it strength in it's world building. His 'cheat' gives access to pills and item's, along with cultivation arts. But none suddenly give a boost to some random new stage of cultivation the author had pull out their butt to try and keep the reader going. This is a great thing! Without the huge focus on what realm the MC has reached, we skip the enemies he faces randomly popping up with stupidly high realms for him to miraculously overcome. We get actual story! A empire, a village, an event, and what's happening in them and to who, all deliver a depth I wish I could see more often. Chapters are long and kept me reading far longer than other stories. I've dropped stories faster than I got thru the first ten. The there's not much of the character spelled out for you. You will have to look at the actions and decisions to see the peoples character, as in the MC isn't going to just stop the tale and wax poetic about his morals and goals. It's been so long since I've read a story not seemingly written as a rough draft, this is the closest to an actual novel.I want more!