Accursed EndlessFantasy Translation, DIE!
Fouth wall breaks are everywhere and annoying, definitions on whats happening is excessive but only non useful info that we dont need. Keeps putting stuff like *slaps his forehead* which is really annoying and unnecessary you dont need to put the star signs and you dont need to keep making the characters actions over excessive and skips important info like what happen when kin fell in chap 5, you also skipped alot about the characters and their personalities. Also you could just write it like this. Ken was talking to the white ball, when suddenly his parents walked into his room. But soon Ken realized that his parents couldnt see the white ball of light and immediately calmed down. He then asked the ball of light “They can’t see you?” the ball of light then replied “ Yes, your are the only one who can see me.” Ken was surprised by this and soon became curious as to how.OrKen then spotted a light in the distance and realized it was the same kind of light he saw when he first met Will, Ken then realized that it was another important character and became excited. When Ken made it to the character and realized it was a girl and injured he became worried, so he and his father who was also running beside him helped the girl back to his house via teleportation along side Will.
Hello everyone:I thought it might be around time for me to do a new review of my story as it has developed far more and become so much more than I ever originally thought/imagined. (Especially being constantly in the top 100-150 was not something I ever imagined)Let's start with a, not sure what to call it. You will realize that my first few chapters have quite a few cliches or tropes. I will admit I relied on them to get started, slowly I moved away and now I harshly look at cliches and will really debate if I wish to add any or not.If I do decide to do so, I will always attempt to do it in a way that will fit naturally in the world and story.On that topic, this story is not a quick one diving into a plot and having the main character have a strong goal right from the start. Eldrian is just a person who was interested in this new type of game, and naturally he is our MC because he has some natural unknown talents.(You wouldn't want to follow an average joe, or would you?)He is not OP, he is not weak. Rather, he is. He grows with time and he learns with time. He forgets often and he does stupid and brilliant things almost at the same time. He is human, and I do my best to reflect that he is.I do my best to reflect this with all my characters, even the non-humans.Next, the story idea. It started as a more realistic game world, and become an 'alternate' world instead. It is most certainly still a game story and the world is indeed virtual and a game, but I do not focus on game elements. They are there, there are stats, there are weapons, spells, and item descriptions.In the heat of combat, they are not brought onto the page. However, I do not neglect them.I always run my spreadsheets and do calculations to determine what effects what spell/attack will have. The stats are important, but I feel pushing them into a fight is distracting. So I almost never do, barring a few unique enemies who do not possess normal vitals.This brings me to my magic system, I get that many feel it is similar to Mages are too OP. However, I started my story before reading that one, and I was at around chapter 30 when MTOP(?) reached chapter 100; when I started reading it.I won't mention it more than this, but I want to make it clear that while it might feel(read) the same, mine is nowhere close. You should realize this after (not sure) chapter 50 maybe, chapter 100 for sure.Magic is hard, and it stays that way constantly. It is a constant pursuit of new and difficult knowledge and skills. Nothing comes easy, everything takes time and effort.On that note, much of my writing dives into these topics in detail. I do not glance at details, but I also do my best to never repeat details. One spell might take one, two, maybe even three or more chapters to learn, but the next spell won't take more than a paragraph unless it is very different.With this said, I also want to mention that the IRL world is constantly intertwined with the story. It is not forgotten, and it is part of the lore and background. After all, ANW was created with a very specific aim, and that aim is one a company in the real world has.Next, a few things I see are often asked/questioned.Romance: Some, but not really. I have introduced a romance early on, but I never really developed it as I am a stranger to the topic of romance.(NTR, Harem): No on bothRewriting earlier chapters: I simply do not have the time nor will that really work, I have however gone through and fixed the obvious spelling and grammar mistakes.Pacing: It is slow, I won't lie. As I said earlier, I go into details and things are constantly happening. There is almost no time skips. By chapter 500 only 6 months have passed, Eldrian is around level 30 (won't give precise level) and Tier 4.However, levels do work differently in this game compared to normal worlds. The death penalty you will also find is really harsh, and my story is not one where the MC somehow never dies. (never made much sense to me, especially since dying in a game is normal for everyone)-------Side note: I dive deeply into topics such as the emotional impact of events, philosophy, and realism. My aim with my magic system is and has always been to bridge reality and fantasy in a 'fantastical' way.You will come to find with time the approach I took for this, I hope you come to love it as I do. If not, I understand.-------I think this is a long enough overview (almost a chapter's length), hopefully, it can help people decide if they want to give it a try or not.
So basically, i started loving the story, it is definetly enjoyable. And by the looks of it, the story can literally go anywhere, and what I mean by that, is that there is lots to cover. Looking forward for more chapters ??
This is a spoiler-free review, intended to let you read the first few chapters without worrying about anything that might affect your first impressions. There are some parts that do contain specific information, but it will most likely be revealed early on. As for the parts that contain my personal opinion, they are mostly in conjunction with observations, advice or suggestions towards the author.
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Supremacy games is a brilliant novel with an extensive focus on character and worldbuilding. The author makes significant attempts to give insight to the reader over any confusion, and masterfully explains things without ruminating over important details, that readers may find the answer to later on. The world-building is in a different league, as with an interesting premise and a beautiful skill in imagery, the author has managed to deliver it eloquently.
There are some points that objectively, bring light to flaws in the worldbuilding, as in a universe governed by a unique standard of deviated laws, there are inevitably some errors that require more of a boring, convoluted, informative explanation of the universal laws of our universe in comparison towards a unique version made of fiction.
Obviously, I do not recommend that the author should write an explanation over these insignificant details, as this is a work of fiction. However, as a reader, I find it more interesting to understand the essential laws in complete depth. As this is spoiler-free, I don't want to be specific, but given this context, Asna should be representative of what I mean. This concept is very new as far as I know, and hopefully, the author will manage to execute it reasonably.
As for the characters, they're solid. I'd like to see more character development later on in the novel in terms of the main character, as the comedy elements do fit him as of now, but will not in the future. If the comedy assigned to him is static, then the character development suffers. As for the comedy itself, however, it's honestly quite questionable. I suggest focusing more on the serious and thought-provoking themes that could be understood in such a universe. It's quite reasonable to think that in science fiction, cold hard information is more significant than the comedic effect of a character, but this is still up to debate, as this is purely subjective.
Cultivation is an essential foundation of this novel. There's no need to be specific, as it is spoilers. Know that among the thousands of Chinese webnovels that merge sci-fi and eastern fantasy, this novel does it excellently.
A majority of people have described that the uses of science fiction as a genre, is boring if executed poorly (which almost always does). There's a lot to consider in terms of human progression if you apply the idea of science fiction itself in regards to technology, physics, economy, architecture and etc. The premise behind the story is extremely well-thought-out and clear, to the point where pragmatic details that should fit the story in a way to prevent plot-holes are glossed over, to the benefit of the author. This is proof of advanced literary skills as even without these details, the story itself is very interchanging and versatile as evident in the fact that the author will intentionally explain the tedious concepts in accordance with the current plot points. As a side note, the author will mention "will be explained later on" to many readers when they find specific errors and I'm certainly curious if the author is secretly exceptional as PR, as I'm always motivated to keep reading by their brief and intrinsic way to cover up plot-holes and explain the ideas behind it.
While the narrative itself is quite thought out, the underlying idea is very limited in the sense that it is still in the beginning stages of the novel. I hope the idea still remains fresh in the readers and that they do not break the immersion by constantly waiting for a new release. It's been an extremely positive experience to explore the domain the author has managed to create so far, and hopefully, they manage to keep surprising us later on in the novel. The amount of edits that the author has made is also astronomical, meaning the author is always looking to improve for the best reader experience.
This novel has a lot of potential. I find myself wondering about what is happening next but never get too attached to that thought. A lot of science fiction novels I've read, all become very boring due to the unnecessary amounts of unreasonable information dumps that cloud the overall story. What needs to be clear is an objective. As this is a gigantic universe with so many details, it's very easy to get lost as a reader. As an example, I find it easier to understand the overall premise, attach myself to the more significant characters and follow what I want to read; as this creates pacing. Information is critical to a reader's knowledge in a science fiction novel and the author has done an incredulous job of acknowledging the reader as an element in the story (as most authors will write for the sake of writing, not caring for anyone that reads it).
In conclusion, the author has done a great job writing a web novel based on science fiction, with incredible writing quality, extensive planning, informative worldbuilding, fleshed-out characters and a significant plot. Everything is still very "up in the air," as this is new. However, I'm certain that because of the way the author treats their audience, the novel will be a masterpiece. So far, it's just been a hidden gem.
Let me start off by saying the characters and their relations and how they affect each other is one of the more realistic ones I have ever read in Chinese webnovel. They actually have a character development instead of the author slapping "They felt closer after talking" or "It was a love at first sight".
And the supporting cast is not one-dimensional cardboard cutouts, they actually care for each other and you can feel it in the dialogue. The author shows a strong hand of " Show and Not Tell". The other aspect aren't things that would be marveled at but it is still good.
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English is probably not the authors native language, and I understand that. Some grammar and stuff have to be changed, but it is fine. The character design is hilarious, him being rich and a narcissist but reincarnating as a monkey.
entah kenapa, setiap aku ketemu sama novel bagus tapi pake bahasa English, dan English itu kelemahan ku, tapi tenang. aku akan .membacanya DENGAN mengunakan translate.heheheh
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By chapter 224 he already f...ed like eight or nine women... and another one being tagged.. there's still about 100 chapters left.. honestly this gigolo, womanizer MC destroys the novel, he teases women and f..cs them more and more often. He is a hypocrite as well when it comes to murder and stuff, sigh.
The pacing is also all over the place. Almost half of the novel is some politics with martial arts then we had this artifical/virtual realm where young elites from all over the world were teleported to, which would be ok if it was only this, but now, suddenly some magic, powerful heaven breaking techniques that some xianxia don't have, formations, devils (?), immortality, changing face, changing gender, changing bodies..!!! MC battling thousands of martial artists/soldiers with his pew pew godly fire blast!! And that WTH plot twist with MC's father. This novel ridiculousness spiraled out of hand much faster and with a much bigger bang than Human Emperor. MC has a cheat that can teleport him between places and stay undetected, he's already kind of god that can assasasinate someone or make him a criminal by putting proof in his mansion or something. The martial artist association in empire or the shadow guard became pretty irrelevant and forgotten.
Better to read The Human Emperor or Black iron's Glory. They're not perfect but i liked them much more than this My Wife.