absolutely amazing for ur first work, really waiting for new chapters,I hope this novel finds great success. I wish I may see u as a professional writer in the upcoming future
I’m giving you a fiver off the rip because there are not enough good mecha novels and mecha is what I love followed by magi-tech(and technomancery) I’ve honestly had this sitting in my library for awhile now and now let’s dig into the world you have created I’ll post a reply to this if i find anything that needs asked or worked on .
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You are doing great author san.
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Well, what can I say about this. I thought (like most of us would I'm sure) that the author would butcher such a delicate genre of exp. However with each new sentence and every page turn I felt more and more immersed! The delicacy of the capitalisation on the "E" and the beautiful almost curvaceous "x" topped off with an upright unfaultable "p" really brought this particular story to a climax for me, the twist in the middle when we learn that *spoiler* "e" had actually loved "p" and not "x" all along *spoiler* made my blood boil with excitement! I couldn't wait to see what x would do... Get revenge? Or be the bigger person (or letter in this case). Please give me the last chapters I cannot bear to see such a masterpiece go to waste, I am so excited to see if x will turn to the dark side. Thank you.
The story doesn't match with the synopsis . The template is taken from "Rebirth of the red dragon, disciple makes me stronger". But this remake version is better.
Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try. Seems interesting enough to give it a try.
From the synopsis shows what kind of this system is. People will be 100% lazy to learn, making money, and eventually to socialize. This system is civilization's pamdemic.
Exactly how I rated it. Story wise it is just a hodge podge. Just plain bad. Writing quality is pretty bad too. Mao Ni has written a 100 chapter story with a 900 chapter companion book. So many repetitions, flights of thoughts. Zero character development. Boy oh boy. A major waster of my time. World building is done well in the sense that it keeps mentioning all this quintessential chinese wuxia stuff that are great but they are always in the background. Now. the translation is the worst. If you want something far better quality wise, just watch Handsome Siblings on Netflix.
"Now comes the part where I relieve you, the little people of the burden of your failed and useless lives. But as my plastic surgeon always said, If you want to go, go with a smile" -- The Joker.
It's a great story, I live the dynamic between characters. The worldbuiding is already there since it's set in the real world. I'm excited to see what happens next and how the story plays out.
P.s great writing and decent editing not too many obvious errors.