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Really hope this novel gets picked for trial read. I was able to find raw and read machine translate through google translate. and it is a really good novel in my opinion. sadly the only way to read more than 50 chapters of this novel to to get it picked for translation because the raw website charges after 50 chaps and since it is based in china there is no way for me to pay and get access to the rest of the chapters. So please help get this Great novel picked.
Zero here! It's zero--OOFF!!!Let's see...A typical genre that became popular in Japan from 2012, but originally, this genre first published in 1980. This is a genre that I always edited and supervised...Well, the story about MC got "reincarnated" into world because crushed by truck-kun or car-kun...hummm...Writing QualityIt's simple and easy to read. Keep it up, cause you don't have "Mystery" tag on your novel.Stability of UpdatesYou promised that? Then do it if your wish come true! At least you must make a hanging ending and a bit long chapter. I'm rooting for you!Story DevelopmentI saw "Harem
I Love it.
I love it and it is well thought out I am just waiting for the next chapter since I saw one has not been posted in 7 months , ,
Very nice story mode with well arranged chapters. It has a good character design and a well established background wit the best writing quality. Thanks to the author for writing this novel.
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Oh come on... All reviewers of this sh*t are lvl 1, the only thing they did was review this novel and their account were made about the same time? For f*ck sake that's sad
I give five stars to this..... really creative...... I recommend this novel to be highly recommended..... ??????????.. the use of words are so precise and intended....
Go! Go! Whoo!So you want to be a Pokémon Master?I got 2 B the one, the only one who canWithstand the test 'n B the best.I got 2 strive, keep up the drive,B a Master.It takes a different kind of skillAnd I won't stop until150 Pokémon are mine.I must define the art of capture (of all Pokémon).2 B a Master... Pokémon Master!I will B writin' a brand new chapter!Pokémon Go... Go... (everybody sing)Na na na na na na na naNa na na na na na na naIt's all about the evolution of the PokémonNa na na na na na na naNa na na na na na na naPokémon Go... Go... PokémonGot my badges and my Poké Ball.Got my buddy Pikachu 2 help me try2 catch 'em all (Gotta catch 'em all!).Yo, it's all about the evolution of the PokémonThe training attaining N' bein'Part of the phenomenon.B a Pokémaster icon... Ha!Team Rocket will B long goneBut first U gotta know about the different types:Grass, Fire, Ground, Steel, Electric,Water, Rock, Flying, Ice, Normal, Bug,Ghost, Fighting, Dragon, Dark, and FairyBut don't forget about Psychic!2 B a Master... Pokémon Master!I will B writin' a brand new chapter!2 B a Master... Pokémon Master!I will B strivin' to be the greatest Master!Pokémon Go... Go... (everybody sing)Na na na na na na na naNa na na na na na na naYo, like I said before, it's all about the evolution of the PokémonNa na na na na na na naNa na na na na na na naNa na na na na na na naNa na na na na na na naGreatest master of PokémonMmmm... Somewhat impressiveNow you've reached the PlateauBut not yet a heroR U ready 2 meet and defeat... The Elite?Can I expect survival against your Rival?And remember... Gotta catch 'em all!Show me what you've got!Pokémon Go... Go... Pokémon Go!2 B a Master... Pokémon MasterI will B writin' a brand new chapter2 B a Master... Pokémon MasterI will B strivin' to be the greatest Master.Pokémon MasterThe greatest MasterPokémon MasterI will be writin'The greatest ChapterSing itNa na na na na na na na...Greatest Master of Pokémon
Positive points: Your grammar is good and the sounds of objects breaking or even the sound of the clock is an interesting point in your narrative form.Negative points: The chapters are very short; The story is very fast; It's lack consistency in the narration; The main character, so far, has no depth and no interesting personality; his friendship with Dimitri is strange; and Mr. Golden must die (yes, I hate characters who are mysterious to cause suffering in MC).General Rating: You should pay more attention to the consistency of your story, for example, in the first and second chapter in which you present the main character is not satisfactory, the main character is an empty person, very unreal, being very difficult as a reader identify with this type of character. And the conversation between MC and Mr. Golden is annoying and unreal, I wanted to kill MC in that moment.From what I understand, you're creating a story where MC is an innocent fool to become a powerful and ruthless "man."However, I thought you could work more on the personality of the MC before training, showing a little of your day-to-day and prolonging the training time a bit more. In this case as you have already published the chapters, I make a suggestion, put flash back on the past of the MC, as he was an innocent fool or a fool easily fooled, also help some flash backs training, like a scavenger hunt or even an enemy made in this prison.Another point is that you should better develop the world of your history, for there is nothing to be able to identify in what year the story goes, what are the political powers of this world, what kind of firepower does this The world has, what the geography of the world today ... That kind of thing.I know it's your first story, but I was honest because when I wrote my first story I had no review that put these types of reviews for me, so the story became so chaotic and terrible that I deleted all chapters to reform this story someday.Do not be angry with me for the Review, I'm just being honest, you can even disregard my opinion if you want.