you have an amazing attention to detail. i love the world you have built. Maybe try pulling at the reader heart, certain phrases or moments in his life.
The pacing of the story is unrealistic and rushed. And the main character feels undervelop and lacks personality.When I first saw that this novel was about hunter x hunter I was realy excited, however i quickly realized that my excitement was fir nothing. By combining a epic manga and similarly epic novel it only causes the novel to be bloated by surplus of concepts. Ultimately this does not feel like a hunter x hunter novel, but instead reads as your standard broken system cultivator novel.
story is interesting and plot is also nice
I feel like this has the potential to be a 600+ chapter novel it is not your normal fantasy novel, I hope this does well.
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Just for being a story that actually stays true to its name, Unlike other story titles with 'immortal' in them , but the character never becomes or never is an immortal....
Crime novels are generally very interesting. This one does not lack in the least. The grammar needs a bit of work though. Overall, thumbs up to the author.
Trash!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well, after 120 chapters I finally decided to write a review, I don't have anything special to say except that the first ten chapters are really garbage and if I had a chance, I would re-write them again, but unfortunately I can't, apart from that, I think the novel is not bad and can be considered at average level and acceptable, cough cough, anyway if you have any questions please ask
your writing style is really something else! it's elegant and beautiful without being too complex. I'd already recommend this novel for the writing alone!
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