[The First Volume] Just short of 5 stars.
STORY⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ (4 stars). The story is mediocre and can be best described as uninteresting but understandable.
Pros:
*There are clear objectives
*well-defined setting
*Imaginative details.
Cons:
*Slow-paced tells your generic plot. Thirty chapters for three plot points; doesn't happen as much in later volumes.
WORLD BACKGROUND ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ (4 stars). What were they doing while they were speaking, what environment are they in, how cold is the water? Long descriptions are a no-go, but no descriptions are worse than that. They do try though, in the first volume where he was in the cave, they had descriptions and so on, but things get cloudy when the wording comes into play.
WRITING QUALITY⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ (four stars). It isn't that bad; there are some issues with the wording here and there, but everything's grammatically correct.
UPDATE STABILITY ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ (5 stars).
CHARACTER DESIGN ⭐️⭐️⭐️ (three stars). There isn't much attention to other characters apart from the main character, but I hear it gets changed later.
Hello, everyone. I am the Author of Alteria. I hope you enjoy the first part of the story I wanted to make for a long time. If you do, please leave a review and tell me what you like and dislike about it! This will help me improve as an author!
This is only the beginning, so I hope you're ready for the ride!
I'm really into your writing style. It's calm and clear, which makes the story much more understandable than stories that simply rush into action. It's very clear you've thought the storyline through. Also I'm a fan of Theo, he sounds totally adorable.
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After a very long time finally there's a good novel option to read and wait for it.. The writing was good, there was no problem in translation, story line was not rushed and characters seems have some depth I truly hope it get picked and continue in same way...
isnt this “sent to a parallel demon world with magic) or sum like that? (Forgot the whole name) but its been out i want to say 4 a tear now.
I've read 91 chapters. Love the idea. Hate the execution and pace.The development is sooo ssllooowww, and the horrible update schedule just makes it worse. I don't expect him to be a god among men by now, but a system should provide more growth at a faster rate. After nearly 100 chapters, Jay still seems weak. When compared to other similar novels, the progress is much more tangible in every other novel I've seen. He has basically only used his system powers THREE times in 91 chapters! Also, the powers he does obtain with the system seem to grow at the normal rate of needing YEARS of honing.Then there is the issue of making small advances seem huge. Jay can now mildly sense what his parasites feel which gives him a low-powered danger warning sense and the ability to sense the strength of opponents. He can also slightly buff or very mildly influence someone infected with his parasites. He basically has 3 very normal protagonist skills. The author acts like these are insane gains in ability when they're really bland.In 91 chapters, he should have used his system multiple times, should have several skills, and should have tangible growth. The author may as well have left the system and parasites out at this rate, and just made the novel about a guy with 3 normal abilities instead of the usual one per person.
first of all, don't make this cringe, and second of all give it some slice of life moment to enjoy the world and make the mc have some level of common sense,don't make him like [ you dare to hit me now I kill you literary] don't make him have a harem, and most importantly don't make him unsatisfied with what he gains,make him smart where he uses the most efficient way to increase his power,don't give the skip training instant power moment, in this kind of novel progress of every moment make us happy and make him smart enough to finding new way to make him strong and earn some money.if you are saying that it became suspicious then I will tell you some thing instantly attaining power is more suspicious and if he work other area and work on his power he will gain power and money and most importantly knowledge and experience.
Hi author here?it's a twisted story of two best friends hope y'all like it?I'm trying to do my best, if you have any questions regarding my book i would love to answer, do read and add your review that would be great?Reminder [ English is not the author's language ]_?
A very interesting story with great characters and interesting settings. The pacing is great and the sentences flow well, conveying the story and the characters aptly. I especially enjoyed the system mechanics and the level grinds and the calm and collected, yet funny MC is always a joy to read. The writing in the earlier chapters could surely use some work, but I took a look at the more recent ones and can say that the quality surely improves! Amazing work!
writing quality is good with good grammar and proper story writing. Good enough to keep readers retain the story.The story development is really good with how you wrote only the necessary details and kept readers engaged with the story. I like how the story is simple and you didn't info dump it. You are really an experienced and proper author.The character design needs some work. I mean how people hate him because he is just poor kid.And is Silvia a feminist. because readers assume things when you don't represent them. I know you want to make things suspensive but just bragging about beauty isn't how you should introduce characters.Other than that the story is very good. The updating stability is good.And world building is just good until now. As it completed in the future
Great book.