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First 5 chapters review and some spoilers
☹️☹️ Read too many Chinese novel and similar plot...
Power system - N/A
Worldbuilding - N/A
Character - 1/10
Started the novel with good feeling with high hope.
Start of the novel was good, kept me interested.
First interaction Still manage to keep my attention.
Boom
Mob characters introduced and started dissing MC
(I’m like cmon focus on the MC and his inner thought and actions instead of this bs but no~)
More pointless dialogue then “your pet only have 1 skill” (something like that)
Here comes the MC with the tipical CN MC move “I will prove you wrong”.
Started showing off (suppose to be face slapping but all I can think of is ‘what is the point of this, u are here to test out your pet power so do it and leave’)
Destroyed the machine (MC is poor and doesn’t have enough money to pay for the machine)
Couldn’t continue reading
Loved the premise. Strong start. The prologue is dark and foreboding. Excited for what is to come. Five stars for now. Will make a follow up review after more chapters arrive...
I am through chapter 150 so far and this is definitely one of the top novels in this genre - an excellent debut, author. :)
The string writing sells it the most for me, as the story is easy to follow and get engrossed in, and the story itself has been very entertaining without relying on lame gimmicks like so many other stories in this category. Very well done, please keep it up!
Very unique story with a fast changing narrative of a persons rise from bottom to top. Hopefully Jermey finds answers and finds out more about this so called “god” in the future. Anyways thanks for the awesom read!
I like this
I deducted 1 star from writing quality because there were occasional glitches in the matrix.
pacing is good but more action might make it better.
it's updated daily.
and though im left with some questions about the world, I like this, end of story.
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So... Where should I begin?
The story looks interesting and I notice that the author did try describing the characters and the setting so we, readers, could imagine it. The problem with this was that the author over-described (if that's a word) both things. It made the story confusing instead of making it clear.
The second thing is punctuation and grammar. There are too many run-off sentences while describing the characters. Use periods and commas. They are your friends. Also, use a grammar corrector program like Grammarly or just write your draft in MS Word so it corrects the mistakes before you post the story. Remember, good grammar can captivate the audience in this sea of stories.
I do think that with a bit of polishing and editing, your story could go far.
The story seem lacking.the author makes essos seem weak and small and didnot have proper knowledge of GOT and how reality work.You should read Game of Thrones : The Norther Realms to get the feel of got.