So far the greatest thing about this novel is... Honesty.. On what the author wants to see and the theme of the novel.I mean. There is no diluting .. No like waste of time.It's still what some may call cringe worthy but i don't care.It's like a drawing of something good but.. i I mean the "technique" still has a lot space to develop.Emm. Man don't worry about critiques.. the way to grow as a writer is to basically; actually write what you want to see. But author. Keep it up. If this is not the last thing you write. And your keep your words honest. You gonna improve. A lot. In the best.
Nothing new was introduced in this short story. Usual tropes, dude transmigrated, is a weak to strong progression, fatty best friend who insults mc as comedy. First chapter is confusing, not sure if that was a translation issue or a cultural disconnect on ancient deities.
it's good idea and devolvement but grammar needs a lot of work
Ha! So stupid, the Author is so stupid! He should have been attracted to the "True Immortal Cultivation Faction" from the first time he cultivated because he gathered all qi in the whole globe to the location of that idiotic Mc. And as that idiot said he is the only one who can cultivate the qi in the atmosphere, so if there is this so-called True Immortal Faction then they should also know the qi in the atmosphere and had long traces that idiot. Really "True Immortal Cultivation Faction" has no role in this story, the author probably added this None-Twisted faction to prolong the story.
The story is interesting; however, the author writing skill is mediocre... A lot of confusion and time skipping. The layout and is a bit unclear. The story contains some humor, but the story itself does not float well... It is a decent novel, hope The Author skills can improve and bring the novel up a few notch.
This has really great potential. So far the plot is intriguing, the characters are well thought out, and each chapter has good content and is not just fillers. Looking forward to more of the novel and hopefully we'll have a steadier updates/more chapters released.
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I need to talk about the late-night pasta scene because it is the emotional core of this entire chapter and I am not okay. Chi Anyu wakes up hungry at midnight, eats cold pasta, and then the system basically blackmails him into going to Xie Junyi's room. He kicks the door open, makes demands, and Xie Junyi—who just got woken up and is clearly annoyed—responds by asking "Do you want soup or pasta?" That is the most domestic villain moment I have ever encountered in my life. Then Xie Junyi feeds him. He holds the bowl, blows on the noodles, and brings it to Chi Anyu's lips. This is intimacy without acknowledgment, care without words, and it's so much more powerful than any explicit romantic scene could be. Chi Anyu just sits there swinging his legs like a kid and eats the pasta, and the whole scene radiates this quiet tenderness that neither of them is willing to name. The System 07 commentary adds this layer of comedic detachment that makes the emotional beats hit even harder. While Chi Anyu is having this deeply human moment, the system is just sitting there like "Host, you're breaking your character setting!" It's funny, but it's also kind of sad—because the system keeps reminding us that this connection isn't supposed to exist. These two are supposed to be enemies, but they keep accidentally being soft with each other. And then the morning after. Chi Anyu wakes up with a wet dream, sits on the bed for thirty minutes like a statue, and can't even explain it to the system. "I can't explain this to you." That moment of vulnerability—him sitting there mortified while the system watches judgmentally—is so painfully human. He's a guy trapped in a novel, dealing with real bodily functions and real emotions, and the system has zero empathy for it. The bar scene at the end is also devastating in its own way. Xie Junyi abandons a business meeting because he thinks something happened to Chi Anyu. "He really wanted to tie the person to his belt and take him wherever he went." That's not a threat, that's a confession. He's so obsessed he can't even pretend otherwise anymore.
I already love this story, I know that I will follow it! As expected from Killerbee! Please give it a read you won't regret it! It may be a bit early to leave al these 5 stars but I do it because I have great hope for this story and for me it is already 5 stars!
Hello, as far i can see this novel should get more popular as it goes on.Personally i really love the whole setting of game world and the side stories are very interesting too, Characters so far are very unique on their own . i hope something similar one day can be made to help people the same way as in the story i hope you wont give up on this story and thank you for writing it :)
Raw title:我的混沌城Status: 670 chapters (ongoing).....Some Game words' translation be better, Otherwise superb Tower Defense game where you can't decide whether MC is Dumb or Cunning...................
dark of night and waxing mooncome to us a single poolhear us sing our witches' songand send us moonlight clear and strongearth and water, wind and fireone and all you must conspireto banish bad for goodness sakecos I need moonshine for my cakeweary travelers long agoshared their bread and made a vowthat they will be forever friendsand so shall be until time ends