Good start, good premise.
The only problem is that your usage of the past tense is wrong, and i think you have this misconception that whenever something is in 3rd person perspective, everything will be written in past tense. That is not entirely correct.
Anyway, i love the character development and the world building. Perhaps, spice up the story with some unexpected events.
Good luck!
The story is good so far. The writing is smooth. The MC is too serious for his age but I think it is acceptable because he is self-conscious about his economic state. I think writing from the first person POV is limiting because it is hard to describe what the other party is thinking when you are not inside their heads but you seem to find a way to do it. good luck and good continuation.
Original name: Nine Star Poisonous MilkCurrently, the novel is very famous in China. Ranked at 15th position of male category. 5 stars totally deserved! Hope this comes out as soon as possible!
Woah! I never thought that this book has actually a huge potential. It's as if a new world has been introduced to us. Very few grammar mistakes and a very enjoyable read. I will definitely recommend this book!The only problem is that the author update chapters very slowly. I really suggest for the author to work hard for it!
Action - Op two swords wielding SAO style but a hundred times better with time magic/lawRomance - although it is a little too easy to get into the harem in my opinion the romance is after Comedy - Modern comedy we all love and enjoyR-18 - some of the best I've seen! Mature - mehSword and magic - a desent rpg classic typeCultivation - although it is confusing at times to be honest they all are!Harem - currently :Moon goodess /empress (not now but its currently the path shown) Wolf girl (npc but as the plot moves you realise...?) Angel healer (class seraph but an elf) Sword spirit (hehe) Crafter ( demon lawyer in real life) Kingdom building -Goal: Celestial kingdom Current(ch 140):...Uh..W-..Well...Um..Reincarnation -There's a solid reason why he came back (ch 110 ish reason reveled )
This was right above mine in the promote you novel section so I thought I would give it a try. I did enjoy it actually and am glad I clicked it. It can now rest on the shelves of the other saved novels I like to read. Thank you!
Best xianxia in my opinion. I've read the MTL version of this novel till latest chapter and ~250c on Liberspark. Some nitpicking in the translation aside, this novel really is a breath of fresh air when you have crapton of similar things spread over most CNs.The world building is extremely good, great foreshadowing throughout the novel and most importantly, it involves comprehension based improvement, not just some legendary liquid coming from some ancient godmother which boosts you like hell sort of thing. Last of all(abstaining myself to keep the review short), the story-line is lovely as things progress.. one may even get emotional, not just by the main story-line but even from side characters' story. Very logical, worth spending time on, and is always great to discuss about.
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I really love how the author described the world, it was all painted for me. and the MC i found really intriguing. I am looking forward to reading more! Please update soon. Theodore❤