If the idea is to be judged here this piece would get 5* easily. Unfortunately, bad grammar makes the reading experience almost unbearable. Use of personal pronouns is wrong and that is a reason why the story is so so so confusing at times. Tbh it is hard to say something to story and character development and design. Focus while reading is simply somewhere else. If you are able to overlook grammar, spelling and word mistakes and errors (!!) then this one could be a gem for you. If you are annoyed by a shit to of mistakes and errors (again!!!) please do yourself a favor and avoid this piece at any cost.
Need more to rate better but from what I have read so far it’s not bad and it has potential ??????????????????????????
You have a good story going on although I find some mistakes in some grammars. I also suggest if you capitalize the first letter of the following paragraphs and the character's names since there were parts where I find things confusing. Period and commas are important and I found that most of the parts didn't end with periods or some parts didn't have commas. But all in all, ignoring those parts, I actually like your story and it is pretty interesting, I find this promising. ??
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I just can't enough of your writing it's really good, this book it's interesting, it's about magic, I wonder if this about witches, I need to know what happens next, couldn't get enough.
Ilove your story ilove you
First of all do the author want to continue updating this novel or not. What I want was a constant updates of at least 5 - 7 chapters/week, cause lately there aren't any update on this novel. This kind of situation really piss me off.
Yeah, I mean...... Yes? No? This novel is really a fifty fifty. Kingdom building novel where the mc has the ability to teleport to one world to the other. Like the sypnosis said the mc will be given the city without having to pay tribute.So that means he is independant basically. So MC uses modern items to trade for money and uses that to build his own city for now.In the 40 chapters he already fought several wars, albeit lackluster explained it really shows mc's retardness. I mean, how the f*ck? This guy really thinks that if he equiped (only about 1 month?) trained soldiers with advanced weapons like crossbows and better quality swords and catapults he can defeat someone's seasoned soldiers with number advantage?Oh guess what? Of course he won! Like he got confidence defeating unorgansized bandits he think he can win against well trained armies? Just because he has better equipment? What, even his soldiers can adapt into modern formations? (In one month and even less).And there's no explanation how he even got his weapons from the modern world, no interaction with the modern world at all!Oh, forgot to say he's a huge f*cking hypocrite, or you could say the author is one cuz in this world there exist demi-humans. So mc accepts refugees and there are demi-humans mixed in with them. Well, he says he will give them equal rights but no, the demi-humans apparantly got less than normal humans. Wow, you change your damn mind faster than I beat my meat!Translation - 5* (Smooth like the hands in my freezer~)SoU - 5* (trial reads, always 5 stars)Story development - 3* (I don;t know how to explain this, read it yourself)Character design - 1* (Overconfident mc with retarded thinking)World background - 3* (demi-humans and medieval technology/era)Overall score 3.4
The story is nice and on point.love it and hope for more☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺
One of those story where every move of the MC gets sneered at,example buying medicine why are you here you can't afford this medicine MC proceed to slap them in the face with his money, even he is just walking someone will tell him how weak he is even after MC show how strong he is in the previous fightIt is still readable but if you don't like the first 10 chapter then its not your cup of tea.
Amazing read. I've read the authors other book as well, so there is no problem in writing quality. only 15 chaps in and i am hooked!I like the mc, even though he is called a loser, he is actually not. even before he got his cheat, he is a genius. world background is modern setting. overall, it's a good book. give it a readddd
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