The story idea of needing of using a pay-to-play system is interesting. Unfortunately most of the sayings and catchphrases use so much of a specific cultures idioms that the translation is garbled on actions, thoughts and descriptions of various things. The mc is so obnoxious that it's hard to find him interesting. With a some solid assistance and some rewriting in other areas it would become a more passable read.
This seems interesting.
Such a shame, the story got me really hooked but the writing quality makes it a headache to read and understand.
Fast passed, the story is going fast, random things happens when there is already something going on.
Characters interactions could be more deep and meaningful, tbh I didn’t feel that much emotions and thoughts behind the conversations.
Also I don’t quite yet understand the MC on a deeper level, he just does stuffs.
wowwwww I like these stories although it's almost hard to understand sometimes but awesome work![img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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Author, thanks for writing your ideas! I loved your book! The protagonist is beautiful and that already makes the reading more pleasant than it already is, the world seems very good and fun, and him being a little dominated is something I liked, because if the protagonist is weak or something and people defend, it gets a little frustrating, and he's not lazy, something very cool, and his powers and the type of system I liked a lot too, and him being smart is another positive point, because the dumb protagonist spoils the reading, I'll give it a go example: "The protagonist doesn't understand something so simple that you get angry" and your protagonist is perfect in my opinion, well the post time is great for normal people, but for a reading addict like me it makes me anxious to wait for your chapters and how good your book is it only makes the situation worse haha, and i loved how the story unfolded so far and the writing is ok too.
A wonderful way of writing, there's an exciting flow through the words, amusing scenarios rushing through the lines, it's an overall good story, honestly.
only a few chapters in and first thoughts on the story is that its confusing and weird. Constant switching between 1st and 3rd person every other sentence doesn't help either. Looking at the last upload makes the novel looked dropped so thats my main reason not going to continue. No point getting invested in a story for it to never continue.
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es de las mejores historias de un rencarno en una bestia espiritual en douluo dalu qu e leido
espero que la continúen ......................
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