Writing Quality is great, there are no rough sentences, easy to understand and the way you write the fighting scenes are good.(Kiss Of Death, Oof... I remembered DitF)
Stability Updates are also good, I assume you update almost everyday.
Story Development is also good, the pace is good, the fighting are good... Though, I think some of the elements are already used though, but there's no harm done, it is still unique it it's own way.
Character Design is good, in Ch1, there are already too many characters, there are those that are based on some Movie or Greek mythology(Thrain, son of Thor, Oof.. Reminds me of Lord of the Rings)
World Background is good, futuristic world with advance gaming technology...Seems. great.
GOOD WORK AUTHOR, KEEP IT UP.
*THUMBS UP*
please be picked
(Slightly spoilery review, but not really a spoiler)
Good novel very enjoyable. The Mc is a transmigrator and more or less the typical cautious cowardly protagonist, but in my opinion its done in such a way where its not overly irritating and fits the novel. After all he is a background character so it makes sense and meshes well with his system's abilities.
Besides the Mc the other characters have been given enough time to grow to a point where I at least have an inkling of each of them, although it would probably take a number of more chapters to make each of them more distinct. (talking about the side characters here)
The development of the story can be considered slow, but I find it to be a good pace for a background character, naturally for protagonist speeds it does feel lacking but in the context of the novel its well paced.
World Background is quite good so far, obviously its not all that fleshed out since the protagonist has stayed in the Sect for the entirety of the novel up to this point, but the Sect feels real at least which is more than I can say for most Xianxia. (although it still has a lot of the blatant Xianxia Sect stereotypes but rather than a flaw I'd say that's more played as a comedic aspect/the world purposefully being like a Xianxia novel.)
To conclude this novel is a solid 4-5 stars, the only reason the score is as low as it is, is because of how infrequently its updated.
I do recommend reading it though if you'd like a change from a traditional Xianxia, and are all right with the fact that the novel rarely update.
I like this novel. The sincerity shown by the author by speaking freely,has added a dash of permanence to the novel. The story development is fluid. Although MC is an omnipotent guy,still the struggle shown by him,the emotions,the sincerity - it all make this nove a refreshing one and hard to put down.
Ahem, cough cough! Just read three chappies of the book, and think it definitely deserves a nice review. Sigh, not many things to criticize the book for, so let's start with praise.
The books main character is quite interesting, comedic actions and profane, ahem! vocabulary, make a very good goblin. Not gonna talk much on the death of the protagonist, too comical to be dark.
First three chapters were nice with good pacing, narrative and descriptive quality. Although some errors were spotted, those can be fixed easily.
The author did a good job with the execution of this story, kudos.
I like the title and the synopsis, i also like the story development, it has this magnetic force that just pulls me in everytime i read it.[img=recommend]
At first I thought this story was just a love letter to pokemon and that was fine. I enjoyed that feeling however with the start of second Dreamworld. the story has really pickup pace and is keeping me guessing.
Honestly, writing is ok. A few grammatical errors but nothing that stops you from reading fluently. The main problem is that his system doesn’t really do system things, the system is not really explored or talked about, the only thing we know is that it fixes his posture when working out or shooting, I wish the system would get an upgrade or something, he has his system and has played five seasons but still loses to the well know centers just for plot, his effort does not match his win rate, five seasons and bro still feels mediocre. I get the whole mature thing with top lives but bro is too zen, talk about his daily life with actual detail, basketball players and fans talk a lot online add a story on that too, show interactions with other players instead of a line just saying "they talked” actually show the talking and write about some actual behind the scenes. Also bro has two kids and a wife, it’s like they don’t do stuff together, they feel like character fillers. I have not seen any more improvements from mc, especially coming from a guy with 2 lives and even has a system, most importantly he has played 5+ seasons and not much to talk about … especially for a guy with a system.
I like your story title it is marvellous, I love your writing style. your plot is super strong. I hope you must complete your novel, I'm waiting for the next.
Fucking chapter 12
There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da
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Its a great comedy.
You should write more chapters, while sometimes the story is a litlle weird its that that males this story so fun.
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Reading this novel feels like swallowing a rock without chewing it. Confusing? I say so.
This is like a rip off Jujutsu Kaisen with Sakuna being an anti hero.And Itadori being 10 times more stupid than he originally is.
Imagine being a god who would do anything he can for Thomas, even without something in return!
he literally said he's apathetic